People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
I think that people benefit more from traveling to foreign countries. I travel to experience new sights, cultures and food. How can you do that if you just travel in your own country? You have to go to South America to see the great work that Native Americans made centuries ago, to Spain to be greeted with the Spaniards’ hospitality and to Japan to eat authentic Japanese-style barbecued eel. By travelling in your own country, you won’t experience anything new – you’ll still see the things you’re used to see, be in the same culture as your own and eat the same things you always eat.
In addition to that, travelling to another country gives you the perfect excuse to learn a new language. For example, I’m planning to go to France next year, and I’ve already started learning basic French with the help of apps on my mobile phone. Learning a new language is a wonderful thing, as it not only helps you get around in foreign countries, but also makes you attractive in the job market. If you’re travelling in your own country, you will never truly need to learn a new language, and will therefore miss out on the opportunity that it brings.
One of my favorite things to do when I’m travelling is to go shopping – and nothing is more fun than to shop in foreign countries. I’m not saying that you won’t be able to shop if you’re travelling in your own country. What I am saying is that you’ll be able to buy things abroad that you won’t be able to buy back home. For instance, when I was in Japan I bought a beautiful necklace made from a rare black pearl. I wouldn’t have been able to buy it if I never went to Japan!
To conclude, I would like to say that I disagree with the statement. People benefit more from travelling to foreign countries than from travelling in their own country. This is because one will be able to experience new things, learn new languages and buy exclusive items when travelling abroad.
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- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. 70
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- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 76
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.162100456621 0.229887763892 71% => OK
Verbs: 0.205479452055 0.158761421928 129% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0958904109589 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0388127853881 0.046263068375 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0913242009132 0.0685040099705 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0936073059361 0.118717715034 79% => OK
Participles: 0.041095890411 0.0351676179071 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76498546616 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0639269406393 0.0309702414327 206% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00228310502283 0.00188951952338 121% => OK
Determiners: 0.0433789954338 0.0887237588012 49% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0114155251142 0.0209618222197 54% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013698630137 0.0139019557991 99% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2003.0 2387.08602151 84% => OK
No of words: 352.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69034090909 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309659090909 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244318181818 0.251872472559 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184659090909 0.174417080927 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127840909091 0.112833075102 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76498546616 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485795454545 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.4979604729 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7058823529 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9267029758 48.84282405 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.823529412 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.647058823529 0.644075263715 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 45.1377005348 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 0.884353741497 1.45489161554 61% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305600391525 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123248520546 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.118307387014 0.0752933317313 157% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.53056265722 0.497263757937 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150899793112 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149970026314 0.114077575197 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177815320048 0.0781384742642 228% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.440765213682 0.336927656856 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0578690291668 0.067059652881 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234917429079 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852719066877 0.0618886996521 138% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.