People spend too much time in enjoyment.
Our world has become a small village with all kinds of people having different desires. However, if I were to label one particular aspiration that would represent entire mankind of present generation, it would have to be the desire to live a comfortable life. As there is the availiability of countless mediums for recreation and the advancement of technology has made the poeople's live easier and more convenient, fueled by the peer pressure, people dedicate thir time more on personal happiness rather than obliging to their duties.
First of all, the access to wide range of options for receration that are available in the market have made it so much easier for a person to get distracted and forget about duties. Irrespective of the nature or urgency of work, a person can simply be lured into fun and enjoyment without even realizing. I have a personal experience related to this issues. Last week, I had a history test to prepare for so I sat down with my books and computers open. As the internet was available in my computer, instead of reading I found myself browsing the social media after every few hours. Consequently, I was completely caught up in some useless website depite the urgency of exams the next day. Now, if there was no access to itnernet, I am certain I would have been able to resist any kind of temptation and focus on my studies. Therfore, presence of these recreation mediums pull a person form the zone of duties to the land of enjoyment.
Adding to that, people can afford getting distracted because of the technological advancements which provide everyone with shortcuts. As a result, more people spend their time on recreational or interesting activities. I'd like to draw a classic illustration from my little brother's study. Even though my brother is a primary school kid, he finds google as his favorite research source so he completes all his assignments with the help of internet. Now that he can complete the work early, he finds more time playign his favorite video games. This example shows how a person can find shortcuts to the problems or at least find the solutions easily and consequently invest time in more fun.
Another reason why I believe people have stopped working on more important things and waste time on their own enjoyment instead, is because they feel peer pressure. Watching a friend going to clubs on a weekend makes a person want tostop working on any task and go have fun just like them. In fact, the internet and social media has made it even more simple to be afected by other people. For example; Last month, when I saw my cousins going for Bungee jumping, I was instantly wrapped up by the intense desire to do the same. Irrespective of the workload I had in office, I made plans with some collagues and went the following week. This example clarifies how other people around us can afect us in such ways that we tend to be moreinclined towards fun and enjoyful activities more than the immediate responsibilites.
It is in this regard people find it more convenient and motivated to focus on personal enjoyment rather than their duties. The availability of options, technological advancement and the pressure from other people swim towards the sea of fun while we should be pushing ourselves towards the shore of hard work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, while, at least, for example, in fact, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2733.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81161971831 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71733761256 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536971830986 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 877.5 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8101124207 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.32 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.72 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13440010324 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366946190592 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553388457713 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730300802706 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278155345629 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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