People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing they should do
It is a controversial topic that nowadays what people spend most part of their time for. Some of them have too time for enjoyable things, while others do things they have to do. By and large, I think that a high percentage of people in this world do things they need to do. I feel this way for two main reason, which I explore them, through the following essay.
First of all, living in today’s world is requested people to work so hard in order to achieve an appropriate and desirable life, hence, they do not have more time to spend for their personal joy. My father’s experience is a compelling example of this. He have worked in a manufacturing factory for several years about 8 hours per day, without any financial problem in his life. But, from a few years ago, he began run into difficulties with the same situation and same wage so that he has have to work more time in comparison with past years.
Secondly, the psychological illnesses is growing increasingly and evolving numerous number of people to themselves currently. You may say why and for what reason. The answer is easy. It is a well-established fact that one of the reasons can be considered is that individuals nowadays engage themselves by working and their job rather than dedicating some of their times for fun and entertainment. For instance, according to news, Japanese have the highest rate of mental diseases in the world at this time, because they pay more attention to working
In conclusion, I strongly believe that today’s people tend to work hard instead of spending more time to their favorite things. This is because, having good life obliges them to do it, and also the current rate of psychological illnesses demonstrates this fact.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
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Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81333333333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83583419042 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586666666667 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6737618374 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.142857143 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29125696439 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10251520226 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138145863502 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188589475091 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126755083796 0.0645574589148 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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