People today spent too much time on personal enjoyment – doing things they like to do – rather than doing things they should do.
Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
Nowadays people spend exteremely more time on the things that give them pleasure rather than using these time to work on the things which they must do. I agree with the given statement because in today’s world there are many more distractions which keep people busy to focus on their obligations and another reason is, since the modern humans have many responsibilities avoidence give people a sense of fredoom and relief their anxities. I will explore my reasons throught this essay.
To begin with the distractions, as the concept of social media has entered our lives, there is an ever going debate on whether users are spending excessively more time by using these applications and badly affecting their “actuall” life or not. I found social media is exteremely distractive due to the fact that it gives sense of a alter reality on a virtual basis, applications such as Instagram and Tiktok provides varied contents and millions of shapes, colors and scenes to be able attract the user which are more than enough to make people busy for a long periods of time. For example, many teenage school-goers of my neighborhood’s high school have an account on Instagram, and according to their parents testimonies, these kids are spending much more time on Instagram than doing their homeworks. This situation resulting with decrease on their school performance.
Another reason why people nowadays tend to spend more time on things that make them happy over focusing on their responsibilities is, modern humans have many responsibilities such as doing a presentation for work, cooking a meal when get back to their homes, house cleaning, helping their kids homeworks and meeting with their friends in order to stay in touch and social. Sometimes all these tasks could be seen as huge burdens on people’s shoulders and therefore, this situation may results with avoiding all the mention responsibilities at the same time. My pesonal experience would be an excellent example for this pressing situation. In order to be successful in my upcoming masters degree adventure I thought I have to take courses before ahead to just advanced my knowledge and I signed up for six new courses in total and I aimed to finish them in a month, however I ended up quiting all of them since they caused me an exteremly high stress. If I could have applied for only one or two courses I would have finish them on time.
To conclude, I believe that in the current times people have a tendency to spend their time on individual exciment than doing things that they are responsible for. There is two main reasons for that; firsly social media applications that people use are highly time consuming and secondly as many people have more than one daily life responsibles avoiding them and focus on their enjoyment gives them a sense of fredoom and relief from their obligations.
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| 2020-05-14 | mubeccel2020 | 73 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... due to the fact that it gives sense of a alter reality on a virtual basis, appli...
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Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... due to the fact that it gives sense of a alter reality on a virtual basis, application...
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Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'period'?
Suggestion: period
...n enough to make people busy for a long periods of time. For example, many teenage scho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2391.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96058091286 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76490328476 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497925311203 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.843411354 48.9658058833 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.785714286 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4285714286 20.6045352989 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197387306323 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828989444476 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100634310005 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156321713207 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631839371406 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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