Earning skills undeniably is a crucial thing among people. A controversial argument that is often raised regarding this topic is whether to develop many skills or focus on one skill to reach success. If I were obliged to choose, I think that people who focus on one skill are more successful for several reasons, on e few of which I will elaborate subsequently.
To begin, I think developing skills require time and money, if somebody wants to earn money from something and become successful in that field, he or she must spend months or even years practicing to get skilled in that job. We don't have that much time our life to become valuable in different skills so we can call oursleves successful in them. I believe my opinion is partially influenced by my personal experience, I have an uncle who is a regular emploeey now, I know in his young ages there was times that he wanted to learn different skills. First he started to learn about atoumobile mechanics and after that bakery, then teaching english and so many other fields. Today he know about all of these skills a bit but not enough to get hired with good salary in any of them.
Secondly, I believe you get successful in your life when you're a master in something. You are successful and rich if you have skills that not so many people have, and the key to get master in a particular skill is focus. When you focus on something, you put all your energy to develop that skill, to get better and better in it, when you focus on something all of your actions will changes based on your goal, you may sleep less and work harder beacuse you know your goal and you know if you put all your concentration on it you will be successful one day. Most of successful people that we see today are a example of this. Great diplomats, inventors, entrepranuers and etc. had focus on developing one essential skill in their lifes like management, programming, negotiating, etc.
I resist the temptation to explain more, hoping there is enough information already. To sum it up, as the reasons suggest, people who foucs on developing one skill in their life are more successful because not only they nobody have that long life to earn enough skill in different areas, but getting master in something require focus.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practicing getting'.
Suggestion: practicing getting
... or she must spend months or even years practicing to get skilled in that job. We dont have that ...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...acticing to get skilled in that job. We dont have that much time our life to become ...
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Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...lish and so many other fields. Today he know about all of these skills a bit but not...
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Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
...ve you get successful in your life when youre a master in something. You are successf...
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Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'change'
Suggestion: change
...s on something all of your actions will changes based on your goal, you may sleep less ...
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Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...successful people that we see today are a example of this. Great diplomats, inven...
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Line 5, column 667, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...eat diplomats, inventors, entrepranuers and etc. had focus on developing one essential s...
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Line 5, column 782, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nagement, programming, negotiating, etc. I resist the temptation to explain more,...
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Line 7, column 228, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'nobody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...successful because not only they nobody have that long life to earn enough skill in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, i think, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63275434243 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57901265409 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511166253102 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.2586166163 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6875 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1875 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419567212804 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143680695684 0.076458572812 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122969808756 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300816284896 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123833629088 0.0645574589148 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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