People who try to acquire more than one skill are more likely to become successful than people who just focus on one skill. Agree or disagree?
People will need to learn lots of professional skills in modern society. This will raise the question of whether people who try to acquire more than one skill are more likely to become successful than people who just focus on one skill. In my opinion, I take the position that we could be more successful by acquiring more than one skills.
First of all, learning more than one skills could broaden our vision because we could understand other professional fields instead of being limited in our original territory.
For example, when I was an undergraduate, I have been an intern at a software company during summer vacation. My own experienced field is web programming languages, like Html and JavaScript, and I thought I would just utilize my past experience to fulfill the tasks. Yet, my supervisor asked me to touch other territories which I was not familiar with, such as artificial intelligence or virtual reality, because he anticipated every intern could bring lots of practical skills back to the college. Afterward, I chose the artificial intelligence project to accomplish, and this was an uncharted field for me. As a result, I used this valuable opportunity to improve my software skills, and this precious experience would make me have a brighter career. In contrast, if I chose a skill which I was already familiar with, I would not be capable of improving my strength.
Secondly, acquiring more than one skills could enhance our probability of being promoted to a higher position. My own experience will be an appropriate instance. When I was a rookie at a big software company, I was not familiar with many skills, such as hardware environment setting or deploying a software program to cloud service. However, I actively asked other seniors about these tough problems, and they also sincerely assist me to solve these technical problems. Afterward, I could complete these professional issues on my own instead of inquiring about other engineers. Soon after, I was promoted to project lead because the supervisors appreciate my extremely strong motivation. By contrast, if I didn’t acquire these skills, I would not be able to get a promotion soon. Instead, I was likely to be limited in my original territory.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I prefer to acquire more than one skills. Because we could not only broaden our vision to other brand-new fields but also gain more chances to advance our career.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 90, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...ills in modern society. This will raise the question of whether people who try to acquire more than one...
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Line 1, column 329, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one skill', 'a skill', or simply 'skills'?
Suggestion: one skill; a skill; skills
... more successful by acquiring more than one skills. First of all, learning more than on...
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Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one skill', 'a skill', or simply 'skills'?
Suggestion: one skill; a skill; skills
...ls. First of all, learning more than one skills could broaden our vision because we cou...
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Line 4, column 229, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
..., and I thought I would just utilize my past experience to fulfill the tasks. Yet, my superviso...
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Line 6, column 31, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one skill', 'a skill', or simply 'skills'?
Suggestion: one skill; a skill; skills
...ength. Secondly, acquiring more than one skills could enhance our probability of being ...
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Line 8, column 72, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one skill', 'a skill', or simply 'skills'?
Suggestion: one skill; a skill; skills
...asons why I prefer to acquire more than one skills. Because we could not only broaden our ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85403590613 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497549019608 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1300367909 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317275806982 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10544561286 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.187552861547 0.0737576698707 254% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232386912779 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.246904415144 0.0645574589148 382% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.