Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting that from your peers.
Everyone has some outstanding friends who could give us lots of beneficial advices. This will raise the question of whether getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting that from your peers. I will take the position that getting advice from older friends is a better choice.
First of all, friends who are older than me will have more pragmatic experiences, such as resolving a problem more efficiently. For example, when I was an undergraduate, I once worked in a well-known software company named Appier, which was a top-notch corporation in Taiwan. At that time, I had a mentor helping me to cope with a good deal of software issues, such as fixing some extremely tough program bugs. Moreover, he also gave me much useful practical advice, such as how to raise my software skills and so on. With his greatly helpful suggestions, I could boost my software ability largely and have a brighter future. In contrast, if I had chosen to get advice from my peers, I might have not been able to obtain such perfect suggestions.
Second, getting advice from friends who are older than me could broaden my vision because they would have a higher educational background. My previous experience will be a suitable instance. When I graduated from the college, I engaged in a software job at a first-rate enterprise named Google. Every junior engineer would be guided by a senior engineer in this business. I was taught by an outstanding engineer named Jack, and he owned a PhD degree. Furthermore, he completed many distinguished projects before I got into this big company. In the beginning, he not only conveyed lots of useful knowledge but also introduced other excellent colleagues to me. Therefore, we often discussed lots of diverse helpful information, such as how to establish a strong contacts in the business or how to maintain a perfect marriage, which benefited deeply in the future. With their guidance, I could raise my capability largely and have more job opportunities in the future. By contrast, if I had decided to receive advice from my peers, I might have not been capable of extending my vision.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I will choose to get advice from older friends. For one thing, I could get lots of helpful software skills. For another thing, I could also broaden my vision greatly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... of beneficial advices. This will raise the question of whether getting advice from friends who are old...
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Line 5, column 761, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'contact'?
Suggestion: contact
...tion, such as how to establish a strong contacts in the business or how to maintain a pe...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, another thing, for example, in contrast, such as, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8635235732 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76507198593 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2250995326 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0909090909 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22727272727 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296808786279 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901903689868 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141049861934 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228831040218 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168013987581 0.0645574589148 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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