Personally, I am of the opinion that famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people. I feel this way for several reasons and will explore them in the following essay.
To begin with, young people strives to be successful. They are of the most wonderful and cherish age. During this time, they will try everything to make a success. As long as a chance shows up, they will chase it immediately without any doubt. Therefore, if a young person see that a celebrity can reach a well-known achievement, he or she will be attracted by it and urge to be the next one just like the celebrity.
On the other hand, lacking of experience in the interested domain push young people to follow cerebrities' steps. Starting of the whole path is always the most difficult part. When a person is too young to have enough experience or gain the necessary knowledge, the easiest way for him or her is to follow. All actions taken by cerebrities in the specific domain will be mimicked by this young person. After all, it seems practical to learn from those who alreay reach the desired result.
Last but not least, the story of most famous entertainers and athletes are usually so inspiring and cheerful. As a result, young people will be encouraged by them. They may begin to think about that all actions these celebrities have taken is worthy and meaningful. Moreover, they can even want to be as famous as any celebrity who they appreciated the most. They will gradually focus on what the celebrity do and how the celebrity perceive everything.
In conclusion, younger people are willing to persue their dreams and will follow what some celebrities have done. It is not surprising that such a large group of young people are influenced by famous entertainers and athletes. Due to lack of knowledge and experience, as I have discussed above, following those who are successful will be an excellent choice for young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, after all, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81120943953 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69442828583 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533923303835 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7827698647 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.55 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.95 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237226435356 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794696098801 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890978571365 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159683789401 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984476993268 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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