Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
it is an inevitable fact that academia plays a pivotal role in every society and it is extremely important to allocate the budget of universities and colleges to be fair in order t to achieve the optimal outcomes. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that sports and social activities should receive budgets as much as classes in universities. On the contrary, others hold the opposite standpoint and disagree with assignment equal budgets. Personally, I concur with the former point of view owing to the reasons substantiating as follows.
To commence with, allocating sufficient budget on sport leads to increase the academic performance of students. to Delineate, nowadays, students have a plethora of assignments and course material bringing about tremendous pressure and tension. Therefore, they are vulnerable to physical and mental fatigue which is decrease their academic outcome. In this line of thought, it is demonstrated by solid research evidence that sport and physical activities significantly prevent physical and mental drainage and revitalize burnout ensue from constant hardworking. Moreover, having a regular plan not only reduces daily tension but also increases the concentration of course material in students by soar the release of brain hormone helping them to focus. Therefore, dedicate equally financial support to have enough sports facilities, in comparison to classes and libraries, in academic environments could be a positive result in improving the academic performance of students.
The second worth-mentioning reason that comes into my mind is that should universities financially support social activities as well as academic classes, will have resulted in an advanced society. To be more specific, It is indubitable fact that to have literate society, people should receive academic education. However, proper social behaviors and responsibility do not teach in such classes nor found in the library. It is crystal clear, in society without sufficient training about social responsibility and role of people in developing countries in various aspect such as health, economics and etc. To exemplify, one study was conducted by my colleague demonstrated that in countries with social activity in colleges, the rate of poverty was significantly lower since people hold a plethora of charity in order to help penniless people. In addition, educated students, teach the poor students for free and by doing so, the rate of literacy in these countries was remarkably high. On the contrary, should students only concentrate on academics and their course material, they will have erroneous standpoint about proper social norms or even become antisocial. As a result, when it comes to dedicating budget, social activities should receive equal funding with academic classes to have a prosperous community.
To draw a conclusion, I strongly advocate the notion that allocating universities and college budgets should be equal between classes and social activities and sport. This is because not only having sports facilities enhance the academic performance of students, but it also lead to having a thriving society by learning accepted social behaviors.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, in addition, of course, such as, as a result, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54508196721 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02498997757 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514344262295 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 870.3 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0958047891 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.3 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262434569773 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829577777471 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724329536308 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175858886149 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521474892111 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 58.1214874552 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 86.8835125448 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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