The rapid growth of cities has a mostly positive impact on the development of the society.
I have been living in the countryside since I finished my master degree. Everyday I wake up early, rushing to the bus station and being afraid of missing the bus that only come one time an hour. Given this situation, I couldn’t help thinking how convenient it was that I prepared my breakfast with ease and follow my own living pace when I was stuying in the capital city, Taipei, Taiwan, without the anxiety over the transportation. Therefore, I agree that the rapid growth of citites could definitely trigger the development of society.
To begin with, a well-developed city enhances the quality of life. In other words, with decent development, a city are facilited with all equipments that people need. For example, it is easier for people to acquire complete medical equipment when they live in big city. To meet the need of great amount of population, there are more hospital in the urban that in the countryside. Take Taipei, people can find a hospital merely every five minutes drive. However, people have to drive for around a half hour from home to the hospital. If there are someone attacked by emergecy illness like stroke, they could acquire proper care in big city.
Furthermore, an urbanized city provides people with more learning resources. To be more specific, people can access varied learning resources in the city. For instance, when I was a college student, I went to National Concert Hall almost three times a week because the concert hall was right behind our university. When there were some well-known musician such as Lang Lang, Yo-Yo Ma, I could went see them and learned from them. Through these experiences, I was inspired and also learned precious lessons. On the country, now I move back to my hometown where there is no concert hall nearby. I barely have opportunity to go to a recital and that makes my life totally tedious.
People need to live in the city for their own good. For the elder and those who are suffering from cronically illness, living in the city removes their uncertainty of their health. For the younger, a well-developed city offers them countless learning resources and makes them better competitors. A mature and decent city would absolutely have positive impacts on people who are living in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9138381201 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67237701174 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577023498695 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9864619436 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5454545455 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4090909091 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139526803033 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427646464368 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743254751536 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821846065106 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557465776972 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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