responsible adults
Responsible Adults
Some people believe that to be responsible adult in the future, children must know how to manage their own money at young age. Others think that in order to be responsible adults, children have to manage their money at a small age. This issue is a controversial one, but from my standpoint a close examination reveals that it to become a responsible adults for people's finances, when they are children they must be taught how to manage their money at an early stage. This is because of two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, managing children's money at an early stage of their lives is crucial to teach them independence. Needless to say, it is critical for anyone to be an independable in this life because it solves numerous obstacles that might face everyone when anyone become an adult. People cannot do without being independent in everything in their lives especially dealing with money. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Back in the days when I was at the age of ten, my parents taught me how to allocate my own money effectively. In fact, at firs it was extraordinarily hard to manage how to spend my money in the right way due to the reason that I would like to eat several chocolates a day when back then. Thus, nowadays I am fully independent when it comes to spending my money; indeed, I have my own department, and no one is lending me a hand financially. This is all because I have learned how to spend my money from and early stage of my life.
Not only does learning how to manage people's money at an early stage in their lives is vital to teach them independence, but it also enables them to accustom themselves to handle different financial problems in the future. That people face problems in their lives is distinctly normal. Individuals tend to solve their obstacles in several ways in order to have a great life. By way of example, a friend of mine told me that he was not taught how to spend his money effectively in this childhood, and this caused him to have numerous problems in this youth. I told him that I was taught to manage my money at an early stage of my life, and now I do not have any financial problem. Therefore, he determined that his is going to teach his children how to deal with money from the age of three due to the reason that he do not want then to face any problem overcoming their financial issues in the future.
By way of conclusion, based on the reasons explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases it is advantageous to learn how to manage your money at young age to be responsible adult in the future. This is because of it is crucial to make children learn independence, and it makes them able to get used to overcoming their money obstacles in when they become adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 351, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'adult'?
Suggestion: adult
...reveals that it to become a responsible adults for peoples finances, when they are chi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, thus, in fact, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46990291262 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62751955038 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409708737864 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.1529315919 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.1 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12647912305 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517829987157 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110737515462 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990450797736 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922441943267 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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