the rules that societies expect young people to follow are not too restrict
It is critically important that the government adopts some stringent laws to control society. I believe that laws that youths are obliged to follow in society are not too strict. I have a couple of reasons why I feel this way, which will be explored in the following essay.
To begin with, the increase in the number of crimes and violent actions in society reveals that we need more strict rules to control these behaviors in a community. Each year, many people come and back to local courts as a result of some criminal activities, such as killing the family members for more family legacy, killing people during driving, high rate of robbery, and other similar challenges. In a hectic life, people are exposed to high-speed changes due to the development of modern technologies, and as a result, the regulation for controlling this change should be up to date to control them. Some of the problems that I mentioned above are not predicted in government laws since they have been done in a new method, which is not similar to preceding crimes. For example, some financial corruption is done through novel methods that it will be difficult to find the evidence and claim them since there are no strict rules to control some bank processes. These examples demonstrate how important is to establish strict rules.
Second, most people easily ignore the rules because of their low compensatory amount, the governments should adopt strict rules to reduce the rate of misbehaviors. The compensation for some criminal activities is not strict enough to restrict the dominant actions. For instance, some family murders do not have compensation because the parents ignore the challenges between them to preserve their identity, and as a result, these criminal activities will repeat more and more in families. Furthermore, some of the rich people who can pay the crime compensation readily ignore the rules for many reasons. If the government does not consider strict rules, the number of misbehavior will increase.
In conclusion, considering all the aforementioned reasons, I believe that rules that societies today expect youths to follow are not too strict. This is because the rate of violent behaviors is increasing. Furthermore, people can afford the compensatory amount of some crimes easily, and as a result, they ignore the rule.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2023-05-21 | slliland | 90 | view |
| 2023-04-10 | KimiaKermanshahian | 76 | view |
| 2023-03-10 | sonyeoso | 90 | view |
| 2023-03-04 | saharmnd | 73 | view |
| 2023-02-25 | Chloe4112002 | 90 | view |
- After completing high school students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university 73
- the rules that societies expect young people to follow are not too restrict 70
- it is better for students to start school late in the morning 73
- the best to relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone 76
- movies and televisions have negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 605, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...e should be up to date to control them. Some of the problems that I mentioned above are not...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...more and more in families. Furthermore, some of the rich people who can pay the crime compe...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08072916667 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76575618608 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489583333333 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3501199072 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.764705882 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212755255148 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727244472945 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863403066812 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155618352681 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775838387771 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.