same job as your parent or differnt job
Some people think that it is better for the children to work different jobs form their parents. People think that when children work other jobs different from their parents, the children will be able to get more experience. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that working the same job as parent’s job will provides the children with more experiences. The basis of my view is educational, financially and personal.
Form the educational perspective, patents consider to be the best role model to their children. Parents pass on positive value to their children. When children decided to continue their higher education and get a bachelors degree, parents are the first who help taking the decision with their children. Parents could guide their children to choose which college is better for them. Parents already passed with these experiences before and they knew which the best is. It is a good chance for the children to get easy information from their parents. Beside, many parents would help their children in their studying. For instance, if one of the parents is pharmacist and his child decided to apply for pharmacy school. He can help his son to understand the subject better. He can discuss with him the materials. He could give him advices. When the children will have the same career as their parents, it allows that children to be more successful.
Financially, parents could help their children to have their successful own business. When the children decided to run their own business, the first reference they ask are the parents. Parents have experiences how to manage a business. Children see that parents are the best references. For instance, as I mentioned above the pharmacist parent can help his child in his education, also the pharmacist parent would help his child to run his own business. The pharmacist parent had his own pharmacy for more than 15 years. He knew how to manage a business. He could help his son to buy the place. He helps his son to renovate the place to be a pharmacy. He leads his son to the best directions, such as from where to buy the medication, and how to deal with pharmaceutical companies. All this information the children will got from the parent will help them to have better business. Children will save time and money, going in risk of trying by them. Parents have gold experiences which easy pass to their children to be more successful.
Personally, it was really helpful for me to proceed the same career as my mom. My mom is a pharmacist. She has her own Pharmacy. She has been working for about 20 years in her own pharmacy. When I decided to apply to pharmacy school, she actually helped me in every detail, such as studying and understanding the courses better. After my graduation, she also helped me to prepare my self for my new business. She encouraged me in the beginning to work with her. I got a tremendous experience from her. She then pushed me to precede a new step on my own. Now I run my own my own pharmacy. My business is really successful. Without my mom experience I will lost in my life.
In conclusion, for the reason i mention before I encourage all the children to proceed the same career as their parents. That will help the children to be more successful in their education. Having the same career as their parents will also keep the children with a better job consequently more money
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, first, if, really, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2854.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 596.0 407.700716846 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78859060403 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94096258147 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68014317246 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.372483221477 0.524837075471 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 45.0 20.6003584229 218% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8539527843 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.4222222222 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.2444444444 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.11111111111 5.45110844103 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 11.8709677419 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 18.0 4.88709677419 368% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134692496145 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395292634 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702156078156 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106928807784 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740793512516 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.61 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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