In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think it is a good idea? Support your opinion by specific reasons and details
University period is the most integral part of life which requires students to make the great amount of effort in order to possess genuine wisdom. Even though, during those years many students face financial problems which push them to work while studying. In my point of view, doing a part-time job when you are studying is not proper, because of its adverse effect on grade and other feasible ways to get financial aid.
First and foremost, taking several courses requires you to make full immersion to be passed successfully. Obviously, the student can`t get the information they needed to complete, in case of doing part-time jobs. For instance, my brother used to work in a hotel as a receptionist when he was in senior year at his university. After working for a few months in there, his grades were plunged and he failed one of his finals. Thus, he stopped working in order to concentrate on his studying.
Next, students have full of opportunities to get the grant which assist them to persevere in financial problems while attending university. Furthermore, sharing such a scholarship make you possible to give attention only to your curriculums. In my university, there are countless numbers of endowment for students from distinct study fields. Clearly, applying for such grant is a considerable way to improve your grades without worrying about money.
In my country, people consider the person as the one who will do many appreciable things for the society if he/she enrolled in a university. For years of attending in university, their parents provide with everything, such as money, food, and housing. It indicates how much effort they make not to disturb students when they have needs to study. In my opinion, working student cannot be allowed, because of the negative impact on future achievements and there is another way to fulfill their needs of money rather than working.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, thus, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05079365079 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75157711482 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584126984127 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.3217424208 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.4375 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0952395085569 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322497224007 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316266260754 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0604631949338 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144932993202 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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