Some lessons for young students (5~8 years old) increase their interest to learn including video games. But some people believe it will distract young students. What is your opinion? Why?
Without a shadow of a doubt, upbringing children and their education always was the matter of concern for the parents. Similar to other things, unprecedented burgeoning of technology has its impact on education, as well. An unanswered question in this area which always has been the topic of controversy and brought about ubiquitous debates is whether new technology, in general, and video games, in particular, is beneficial for children education or not. Despite the arguments asserting that video games are two-edged swords and are detrimental to both physical and mental health of children, I believe otherwise, maintaining that the benefit of this emergent hobby outweighs its demerits. There are several cogent reasons which bear in mind, two of which, activation of brain and providing an intriguing space, will be elucidated in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, the crux of the matter lies in the fact that video games give rise to enjoy virtually all the human sensations and different part of brain. to shed light on this, I explain the result of a psychological study. A research conducted recently has revealed that playing video games not only does not hurt child's brain, but also pave the way for a collaboration among different senses. This result can be extended to children, as well. Whenever a child plays video games, he or she tries to focus on the game to win or get a high score. As a result, their skill will improve drastically, and their interest to learn new things, as well. Of course, this is not the whole story.
Another salient point in corroborating my stance in this subject is the tendency toward this games which is ensues from their attractive graphics or gameplay, is a mean to learn new things. I can exemplify myself in order to clarify this statement. When I was 7 years old, my father bought a computer and installed an English game on it. I was intrigued by playing that game and getting familiar with a new language. Consequently, after all this years, I still remember words and pictures vividly. Had I not played that English game, I would not have been avid to learn English. Admittedly, a child's brain is analogous to a wet tablet of clay that methods like playing decent video games can have an imprint on it.
To put it briefly, all the enumerated reasons converge to the point that based on mentioned grounds, incorporating brain and different sensation and a mean of learning, video games not only does not hurt children, but also broaden their horizons and are an effective incentive for learning new things. It is recommended to discover merits of new technology and to use them as a prominent tool.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...upbringing children and their education always was the matter of concern for the parents. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...sensations and different part of brain. to shed light on this, I explain the resul...
^^
Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... in this subject is the tendency toward this games which is ensues from their attrac...
^^^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...a new language. Consequently, after all this years, I still remember words and pictu...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, if, so, still, well, after all, in general, in particular, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90949227373 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76221840965 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538631346578 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5289137704 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.904761905 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136464620042 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396575584522 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367798142561 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872428760532 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166062483142 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...upbringing children and their education always was the matter of concern for the parents. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...sensations and different part of brain. to shed light on this, I explain the resul...
^^
Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... in this subject is the tendency toward this games which is ensues from their attrac...
^^^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...a new language. Consequently, after all this years, I still remember words and pictu...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, if, so, still, well, after all, in general, in particular, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90949227373 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76221840965 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538631346578 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5289137704 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.904761905 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136464620042 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396575584522 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367798142561 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872428760532 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166062483142 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.