Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
School life is the best time and everyone try to get best result in school exam There are several things to encourage us that gaining good grade. People are having a hard time reaching a consensus whether that paying money is best way for inspiring in school-age children. Some people hold conflicting idea. As far I am concerned, I totally disagrees with the above statement. There are several reasons to support my idea and I will explore it in the following essay.
To begin with, this additional money can lead a child in cyber crime. In our country, there are a plethora of school going students spend their money in cyber cafe. They watch an unwanted video such as porn, violence and so on. As a result, they act with others what they watched and it impedes to build to moral values. For example, my cousin who is a student of class seven. Though, he is a brilliant pupil, he often go cyber cafe shop. He gathers a lot of porn video from there and behaves rudely to others of the student.So this idea is too bad according to my cousin.
Secondly, some student may use this money for good purpose and it will help them to do well in the exam. But the percentage of this category is very low. It is ovbious that they spend it to eat something that is unhealthy. For instances, after school break, we see this scenario standing on food shop Consequently, they then frequently go those place after getting more money.
Finally, this will make unbalance competition and leads a long suffer them. For example, some students take it as a positive way on the other hand most of the student will do sharp practice during their exam. To be more exact, the plan of giving money for each high grade leads student go into astry.
To sum up, given the factors above, we may reach a conclusion that the money gives to children is not a productive idea.
School life is the best time and everyone try to get best result in school exam There are several things to encourage us that gaining good grade. People are having a hard time reaching a consensus whether that paying money is best way for inspiring in school-age children. Some people hold conflicting idea. As far I am concerned, I totally disagrees with the above statement. There are several reasons to support my idea and I will explore it in the following essay.
To begin with, this additional money can lead a child in cyber crime. In our country, there are a plethora of school going students spend their money in cyber cafe. They watch an unwanted video such as porn, violence and so on. As a result, they act with others what they watched and it impedes to build to moral values. For example, my cousin who is a student of class seven. Though, he is a brilliant pupil, he often go cyber cafe shop. He gathers a lot of porn video from there and behaves rudely to others of the student.So this idea is too bad according to my cousin.
Secondly, some student may use this money for good purpose and it will help them to do well in the exam. But the percentage of this category is very low. It is ovbious that they spend it to eat something that is unhealthy. For instances, after school break, we see this scenario standing on food shop Consequently, they then frequently go those place after getting more money.
Finally, this will make unbalance competition and leads a long suffer them. For example, some students take it as a positive way on the other hand most of the student will do sharp practice during their exam. To be more exact, the plan of giving money for each high grade leads student go into astry.
To sum up, given the factors above, we may reach a conclusion that the money gives to children is not a productive idea.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 50, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the best'.
Suggestion: get the best
...fe is the best time and everyone try to get best result in school exam There are several...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...g a consensus whether that paying money is best way for inspiring in school-age childre...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'disagree'
Suggestion: disagree
... idea. As far I am concerned, I totally disagrees with the above statement. There are sev...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 419, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
...ough, he is a brilliant pupil, he often go cyber cafe shop. He gathers a lot of po...
^^
Line 2, column 525, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...behaves rudely to others of the student.So this idea is too bad according to my co...
^^
Line 4, column 272, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leads'' or 'lead's'?
Suggestion: leads'; lead's
...lan of giving money for each high grade leads student go into astry. To sum up, give...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 50, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the best'.
Suggestion: get the best
...fe is the best time and everyone try to get best result in school exam There are several...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 223, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...g a consensus whether that paying money is best way for inspiring in school-age childre...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 341, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'disagree'
Suggestion: disagree
... idea. As far I am concerned, I totally disagrees with the above statement. There are sev...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 419, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
...ough, he is a brilliant pupil, he often go cyber cafe shop. He gathers a lot of po...
^^
Line 7, column 525, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...behaves rudely to others of the student.So this idea is too bad according to my co...
^^
Line 9, column 272, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leads'' or 'lead's'?
Suggestion: leads'; lead's
...lan of giving money for each high grade leads student go into astry. To sum up, give...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3028.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 672.0 407.700716846 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50595238095 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.09145979004 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35774403108 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.290178571429 0.524837075471 55% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 950.4 618.680645161 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 20.6003584229 194% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4544466402 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.075 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.53405017921 221% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310872960118 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803323691316 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546218538085 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158453444661 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626579644 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.1 8.01818996416 76% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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