Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Parenting takes a lot of effort and energy and it requires a great deal of attention and determination especially when it comes to the children's education.On this matter some parents choose to encourage their children with material prizes when they manage to get good grades.In my opinion,this idea is not a very good one.I feel this mainly for two reasons.
To begin with,children's education is a sensitive subject and it should be something that they become passionate about and if their grades become associated with money they could loose interest in what they are leaning and focus on the reward they will be getting instead.Even if parents manage to get their children to achieve high marks it wouldn't be fruitful and it would be in vain since as they grow up and become more aware they probably would find ways to manipulate their way into good grades.My own experience was when i witnessed my friend cheat on her exams and ask others to do her homework in order to get the money that her father promised her and she couldn't be any less interested in what she was learning moreover her parents were completely oblivious and we under the illusion that their child was a good student.
Furthermore,children at that age are most recipient to life lessons and what kind of a lesson they would learn by receiving money in exchange for god grades.This behavior demonstrated by parents is a message to their children saying it is okay to focus on the materiel rather then their personalities and academic carrier as a result getting good grades which should be veery responsible child's goal is mutilated and becomes a reward hunt instead.When i was in middle school my father had the habit of promising me gifts and money if i get high grades and bit by bit i became less focused on my goals as a student and more focused on the prizes and thus forgetting what the essence of my education was ;building character and sharpening the skills.
In conclusion,giving children money to incite them to upper their grades is a bad idea this is because,they would be less interested in their education and focus on the material rather than on their goals.
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- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, thus, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1785.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7855227882 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82952216618 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514745308311 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 93.0 20.1344086022 462% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 261.236482904 48.9658058833 534% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 446.25 100.406767564 444% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 93.25 20.6045352989 453% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 29.0 5.45110844103 532% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35062477735 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216921004869 0.076458572812 284% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0134623538229 0.0737576698707 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216921004869 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134623538229 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 47.8 11.7677419355 406% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -14.46 58.1214874552 -25% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 6.10430107527 260% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.4 10.1575268817 378% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.69 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.51 8.01818996416 144% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.002688172 285% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 39.2 10.0537634409 390% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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