The world without cell phones cannot be imagined in this decade. They have become a part of our everyday life and with the invent of internet it made them more useful right from getting any information at our finger tips to booking a cab in a second. But ,When it comes to children using the cell phones there comes a dilemma whether they should be allowed to use or not. From my experience as a volunteer Teacher and brother, I can say that parents should not allow their children’s to use cell phones with internet. There are quite a few reasons for that opinion of mine.
Firstly, children are not matured enough to understand the appropriate and safe usage of cell phones. There are many bad people out there who want to misuse this technology by invading the privacy of others by cyber activities like fishing and children’s become easy prey for this kind of people. And since with cell phones one can do various kinds of activities like gaming, social media interaction children will be losing a lot of time which they could be using for studying or playing outside with their friends.
Secondly, children’s with cell phones will be isolating themselves from the world and will be living in a virtual world of internet. They don't socialize themselves with the others around them and will be spending their time with the people around the world. The reason for me to make such a bold statement is because of my experience with my brother and with the children I have come across. For instance, my brother he is always spending his time with phone and won't talk to anyone around him but when he is asked do you have any friends, he says he has lot of friends in his social media. But with no one to talk face to face how will he face the real world where the behavior and social skills are important.
So, in my perspective children should not be given with cell phones until their parents think their child is mature enough to understand the proper usage of smart phones.
- TOEFL integrated writing Altruism 48
- Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones cell phones with Internet access while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch Which point of view do you think is better and why 60
- Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones cell phones with Internet access while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch Which point of view do you think is better and why 65
- Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones cell phones with Internet access while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch Which point of view do you think is better and why 65
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time Which of these situations do you think is better 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58426966292 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35216876344 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502808988764 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.3402792642 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.571428571 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254031928129 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976354647075 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05089995999 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169632311038 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196777770604 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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