Some parents offer their children money for each high grade they got in school. Do you think it is a good idea?
Family members have the main impact on young children because children spend most of their times at home for example for resting, eating, doing homework, and watching television. Most school- age children need attention from their parents and teachers to be motivated for studying. While some parents offer their children money for each high grade they got in school, others take other ways to motivate their children. In my opinion money is not always a good present for children.
First, giving money may cause children to get some bad habits. For example, the children may use to do their homeworks and other tasks only for money. Moreover they learn to love money. This can affect their personality. And when they grow up and work in the society, they used to do their tasks only for money not for helping society.
Second, children have to understand the value of education and learning. They have to know that getting good grades and studying hard help them to have a better future. Offering money for each good grade makes school- age children reluctant to high values of education such as success.
To conclude, offering money is not always a good present for children. There are many other things to offer such as a good meal, a short trip or even a beautiful notebook. It is better to teach our children about high values of education and inform them about a successful future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...meworks and other tasks only for money. Moreover they learn to love money. This can affe...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, second, so, while, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 52.1666666667 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1154.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 239.0 407.700716846 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82845188285 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30784905463 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 212.727598566 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548117154812 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 618.680645161 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7435557464 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9333333333 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9333333333 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.527316848005 0.236089414692 223% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184301621356 0.076458572812 241% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126541245451 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316529350991 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103672938901 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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