Considering the development of education as a major line of the developing countries attended parents to pay more attention to their children's studied. there are varios methode which had been presented over the cors of time for being success at studied in schooles which is kind of embaresing for official adminestrative. Some parents belive that regarding the money for obtaining good mark is kind of helpfull to get better score. However, others disagree. From my points of view giving money to youngsters whould be efficent. I feel this way for tow reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, ant thing that play a rull of incentivising is nececery for every kinds of age, in Highschool children need to be injected some encoureging materials to persu and continues their study in a powerful way. In fact, getting monney for each good mark is a remarkable tools of encouregment for student to be success over the cours of study time. One of my own example is a good case in point. I remember first time that I had encircled with lots of pressuer during my exames' time which forced us to spend most of our time to study inorthe to pass whole courses. One of my techers gave me a significants amounth of money after passing the first exam, which was realy surprisingly. I aquaierd more possitibe energy to pass my second exam which gaiened me an spactacular result.eventually I had noticed that giving some prises like money which is known as neccery tools for everyone could be dramaticaly motivates me to be successful in my exames.
Secondly, school age is known as the best age for leatning every essentiality. childrens need to learn how to behaive ehen they are facing differets possition. Therefore paying money to student in front of gain good mark would be teach them to behave logicaly and minedly. the results of many studies represents that the more students engage with spending money in the earlier age the better life in the futures would makes. As the research shows pay money in highschool for gainnig good mark will envolve student to learn how to spend and make and save money in the future.
In conclusion, I firmly agree with the statement that it would be better for student to get money its not only encoureg them to persu their study but also prepered them for their future's life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76049382716 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66240629037 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535802469136 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8217774872 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.111111111 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232441161796 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790608691868 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528431253876 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150682006763 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406967842719 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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