some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. do you think this is a good a idea?
That encouraging children especially school-age children play an important and positive role in their studying and help them to practice a lot is an undeniable fact. Should parents realize the significance of children in excelling them, they ponder over encouraging children much more scrupulously. This issue has recently been the topic of debate among parents. and I believe that parents should encourage children with the different way such as they can give them money for high grade.
I believe that parent should not only offer them money their children but also give them other prizes for instance toys, and there is my justification, to begin with, when I was in school, my father offered me, if had been toke 20, he would give me 1 dollar. Hence, I tried to take 20, and, my father encouraged me to study a lot. The second why I advocate this point of view liaising the fact that when children have money, they can save there. there is no doubt that children learn how they can save money. In childhood, I had saved my prizes that my father had given me and I could buy a bicycle. I told everywhere which I bought that myself. Therefore child can be more self-confidence.at last but not the least, parents should protect thier children by different ways that one of them is financial protection.
Having discussed the issue from that point of view. I would rather look at it from another perspective as well, I believe an English proverb that a coin has two sides. therefore every idea maybe has bad result, when parents give their children a lot of money, children may think that it's there duety and this problem has a bad influence on children.
By taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, the following conclusion can be drown about the issue of underestimating the advantages of offering money for high grade in studying of children is not logical. Attending to this issue meticulously contributes to making children better than past, and can improve several aspect of them
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- tpo49 3
- summerise the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific point made in the reading passage. 3
- tpo 50,q2 3
- summerise the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific point made in the reading passage. 88
- summerise the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific point made in the reading passage. 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'several aspects'.
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...ldren better than past, and can improve several aspect of them
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86257309942 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.776671063 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558479532164 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8868399045 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9375 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284820268397 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870933800263 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759080989411 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177763347522 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446185832783 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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