Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that taking care of the children is a very complicated and difficult task for parent, since today both parents are working out of house, so children should spend their free time without them. In this situation, parents must provide plans which create pleasant time for children during those times. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that it is better for children to fill in free times with additional school works which can assist them for more success in the class. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that when parents do not have a lot time to spend with their children, the best use of time is to have fun playing games or sports.
First and foremost, parents are really important part of children life. Children need them to feeling safe and happiness. Therefore, in a condition which unintentionally parents cannot spend a lot of time with their children so they should provide somethings to replace it. Participating in group games and sports would be helpful in order to provide children with the sense of belonging to a friendly communication. It is important because children require to receive a huge attention from their surrounding area.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that the group games or sport would be a good opportunity for socialization and teaching appropriate social behavior to children. Today, often, parents have not enough time to have a common family meal. Thus, How children should learn the necessary proper behaviors. Now this essential role should be covered by education system, schools or private child caring organizations. During play, the instructors can teach social and communication skills to children, in order to replace parents’ role.
Finally, yet importantly, students spend enough time in schools to learn and practice for school works. Therefore, it does not make sense that other free times be used for school works. This approach not only have not any benefit for children, but also it raises the threaten of depression and anxiety on them, since these children are naturally vulnerable to depression attack. Improving students grades in school would not successful without attention to their mental and social health.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that when parents do not have a lot time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun. It is because children need to present in friendly communities which fill in their sense of belonging, and it would good time to practice social behavior, and because progress in education is not possible without happy and health mental state.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 459, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'receiving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: receiving
...t is important because children require to receive a huge attention from their surrounding...
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Line 6, column 264, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...enefit for children, but also it raises the threaten of depression and anxiety on them, sinc...
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Line 6, column 408, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion attack. Improving students grades in school would not successful without atte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, really, so, still, therefore, thus, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0846325167 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67001916403 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487750556793 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6323891426 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.15 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.45 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382699825362 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128672813523 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157667684951 0.0737576698707 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237264050036 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117317279491 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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