Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
children development are a controversial topic for decades, there is undeniable, nowadays parents are busy at works, and some people believe that it is important to pay with their children other than do homework together during their free time. however, in my personal perspective as an occupational therapist, we regard play as a critical role in child's life. Here i will propose examples to express my opinion.
First of all, time is limited, parents nowadays don't have enough time to be with their children, even if they do have time, it is hard to prevent their parents from technology devices, thus, it is more crucial to decide how to spend their time equally. In many theory and experiences, children develop their ability and capacity during play. Nevertheless, people kinda regard play as lazy and fun, however, play with cubes, sand and other small objects could help children achieve their ability at manipulating it, also improve the way of thinking and cognitive ability. thus, without creat such an environment for children to play, they seem like much delay in hand skills than others. play is playing a crucial role of children, with parents join in, they can also imitate their movements, and building the relationship as playing partner.
Second, playing sports in western world is a common entertaining activity, however, it is much abandoned in asian world, due to the time management plan. Regardless all of that, I've been devoted my time expressing the importance of sports. it has many beneficial consequences may not seen in a day but for a long-term outcome. For example, playing soccer, basketball, baseball, and many of the locomotive activities is the way to promote muscle mass, and increase muscle tone, etc. In this case, sitting at a chair and doing school works may have no such benefit as sports even with parents together. children can learn creativity, competition, cooperate attitude during play sports. other than that, sports can increase the ability to move coordinate, and concentrate. it is how children learn those techniques from life, thus, for the development of children, parents should make their time play sports with children.
Thirdly, while the schoolworks are as important as play and sports, parents is advised to be an administrator other than a companion role to their children. it is that if children get used to do their works with parents, it is likely that they will have more possibility rely on them, and lose the ability of time management, instead of control it themselves. In this situation, not only play with children can make themselves more responsible to the works and also be the owner of their time in life.
Finally, while some others may think if they only have little free time, it is their job to do schoolworks with their child. For me, from above mentioned reasons, it is much more important to play with their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, third, thirdly, thus, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2439.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04968944099 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70609363986 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486542443064 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7237962641 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.142857143 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395400196319 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117673616263 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974109565081 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254024348461 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358104137514 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.