Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, people have to spend a major part of their time in the workspace. Therefore, they have limited time for their private lives. In this approach, some people believe that parents should assign their free time for playing with their children. However, others believe that parents are supposed to assign their free time for their children’s schoolwork. In my opinion, assigning time for playing games is more vital than schoolwork. I will explain my viewpoint through two outstanding reasons
First, as a result of modern technology, most of the people suffer stress and anxiety in their lives, and children are not an exception from these issues. Children need to spend their time with their parents, but parents, because of the hard situations in our lives, are not able to assign much time for their children. Therefore, parents should do some activities for reducing children's stress. By doing so, parents are able to interact with their children and find their problems in their lives. In addition, spending time with children improves parents' and children's mood, and it brings about to improve their efficiency in the school and workspace. By contrast, children’s educating is as important as their mental and physical health, but, by ill and hysteric generations, we cannot manage the future of the country.
Second, parents are able to teach school courses by playing and help their kids do their homework. There are a great number of methods that parents can gain through simple searching on the Internet. To do so, parents can find practical experiments on the Internet, and combine them with playing. On YouTube, there are many videos that were prepared according to students’ course material, and parents can implement these experiments in real life. By doing so, fathers and mothers can learn and design a practical method for improving their children's knowledge. Furthermore, they spend their free time in a proper and efficient manner, they will become a close friend with their kids. For example, by playing football, they can teach quite a few topics physics such as movement, speed, dynamic, and static, no name but a handful, they are able to improve their children physical, mental, and teamwork abilities in their children.
In conclusion, reducing stress and innovation in playing are two important and practical elements that by means of them, parents can fill the time gap between themselves and their children. Additionally, parents not only can improve their children’s mental and physical health but also can assign a good deal of their free time for their kids’ advances.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'topics'' or 'topic's'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17136150235 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59064865789 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471830985915 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5337768982 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.15 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324258367319 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133731026428 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757773788043 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232034686862 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749493776367 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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