Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of the time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork,
Which of the two approaches do you prefer? 300 words minimum
Family is the most valuable thing in the world, and the parent's sector is the foundation to appear as a good family. The parents spend their time by doing sports and games or helping the children’s school activities is controversial. In my perspective, I agree with the use of time with the baby for external school activities.
The children in modern society have to learn a variety of subjects and activities, and they are already cramped in their brain due to the load of school lessons. Parents, hence, should be inhibited from thinking about their school work all the time, and they ought to play games with them and go to the park and zoo to relax the tired mind of them.As a result, these become the benefit of family bonds.
In addition, parents ought to participate in searching for hobbies and promote the skills their children like, for instance, by doing sports. Sports can gain physical strength and good health for the children. Drawing from my experience,when I was teenager, my family went to work on weekdays and I felt lonely and depressed and not in very healthy conditions, at that time, my family planned to play badminton with them every Sunday, that was the most precious thing in my life. When we played, I was pleased that we could know each other very well and became much better than before and stronger.
Furthermore, social communication and interaction illustrate a vital role in the life of a child in their environment. Therefore, parents must emphasize to obtain a tight-knit family and interact by watching news and movies together .If the children have a great relationship with family, the communication with the surrounding becomes perfect too.
In summary, busy parents are hard to share with their family. Nevertheless, the parents should use the time to have a number of fun games and sports with the children to get an adorable successful family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89440993789 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73204390273 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5049110497 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.230769231 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32437116983 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117152467639 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090723445307 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190110535915 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894641433962 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.