Some people forbid young children from usin smatphones{cellphones with internet accesss} while others disagree and believe that they
are importnt tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better and why?
In this contemporary setting, children are denying having access to Smartphone. Many parents refused their younger children to use cellphone with internet access because of the hazards emanated, rather than its purpose for communication. I agree with the idea of parents not allowing their children using phones with internet access. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, it promotes immorality among the children. Smartphones developed with the expansion in technology for smooth, easier and faster communication. Moreover, parents appreciate the usefulness of the cellphones because it has made many activities suitable between them and their younger children. However, the havoc generating by giving it to the children made many parents refusing them to use it. Children are intelligent and inquisitive, they want to know more, in the process especially when handling cellphone with internet access, they will visit different websites that are not suitable for them whereby learning all sort of immoralities unknowingly to their parents. For instance, my cousin of 10 years old was given a techno spark 3 phones by her mother to communicate with him while in school. In the recent times, she started noticing some strange behaviour in his character like threatening to fight his siblings with knife and other harmful objects. She discovered aftermath, his son watches dangerous film where he learnt how to use weapon to combat. Therefore, allowing children to use smartphones increases immorality which parents don't appreciate.
Secondly, it makes the children not to be industrious in their studies. Children want a very quick and fast method when it comes to academic level whereby internet has becomes one of their favourite sites to visit. Teachers are complaining about the attitude of children towards their studies because most students refuse ruminating on ideas in today's world, they prefer using internet for immediate answers. For example, my niece of 12 years old, when she's given assignments, she will rapidly take her mother’s smartphone to search for answers. Her mother warns severally but she was adamant until she performed woefully in her last examination as a result of not able to solve some problems in the exam hall.
In conclusion, I strongly support the opinion, of parents rejecting the idea of their children using smartphones because it increases immorality and makes them to become lazy in their school activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, sort of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38422391858 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8234599356 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567430025445 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6828171644 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.368421053 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.10526315789 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162801828686 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562791465038 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332841205708 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100763484353 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524648481658 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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