Some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while others think realistic goals are more
important. Which do you prefer and why?
In the modern era, a dream has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, people have always sought ways to achieve aims. Some people may hold the view that human must have chivalrous dreams in their life. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that individuals must have real aims in their life. I content that people better have a realistic dream than having chivalrous aims. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that people who have a realistic dream become a more successful person than others. To elaborate on my point, when people have realistic aims, they would seek to achieve them. In this situation, they start to timetable their life and create many stages for achieving their goals. These people have plans for all days, weeks, months and years, and they always do activities that are parallel and alongside their goals. Humans who have plans do not waste their time; indeed, they consume their time effectively, so they will become a prosperous person in their life. Consider a girl who wants to be a successful engineer, for instance. In her life, she starts to plan for life. Therefore, she studies her lessons as well as she can in a high school, so she would enter a high-rank university. Also, at the university, she studies hard, and she will learn many applications related to her major. So, when she will graduate from university, beyond a shadow of a doubt, she will become a successful engineer. Nevertheless, if people only have an ambitious dream, they would not plan their activity that harmony with their aims, so they may never receive their aims.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that individuals who have real dreams are confidence and flourishing person. To shed more light on this matter, when people have real dreams, they are able to achieve aims. In other words, they believe that they can do each task or aim they want. When people attain their goals, the human brain starts to release a great amount of dopamine. Dopamine is an especial hormone that is responsible for creating a sense of satisfaction and happiness in mind. As a result, these people become a happy and flourishing person. However, if people have ambitious dreams, they would not achieve their aims. In this situation, they feel they are a failure person, and they cannot achieve their aims in whole life, so they will become depression and ancient person.
All in all, considering all the aforementioned reasons leads us to the conclusion that having realistic dreams have several positive points than ambitious aims. I believe that people who have real dreams not only become a successful person in their life but also become confidence and happy person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01673640167 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52731181677 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458158995816 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0282405991 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8148148148 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7037037037 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59259259259 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112504934776 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425163737555 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369426034553 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.089986885812 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022836163787 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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