Personally, I do not support the opinion that computers have made our life easier and more convenient because it causes less communication in person and led to misleading in our life. In my opinion, computers put us into the stress society.
Since it has been a common that everybody have computers, we rely on the technology. For example, we do less writing by hand with pens and papers so many people tend to forget spell or complicated words because whenever we could search and find it online. Also, recently the companies try hard to make our life easier such as internet shopping and food deliverly service. Amazon is the leading company in the world however if they distribute fruits, vegetables, books and clothes, who is going to outside? It is kind to elderly people who are easy to get tired or have some reasons for not going outside much however if they buy whatever they want online, they will go outside less than before.
At work, laptop is becoming a necessary equipment. Especially for people work on technology or IT fields, they use computers all the time. For instance, I worked on web design company as internship. My advisor used Skype for meeting with the company which is not located in same city and discussed about important deals. It seems like useful and reasonable because we could cut travel time and costs, in the contrast, how does she trust and make a decision for new project? The information she has was the only voice and images through the laptop. I think it is too small tips to decide. The other example is that "remote work". Nowadays working from home is getting understandable because people considered of balance between working and life. If family get a baby, they would love to take care of their child. They would love to spend time more at home so many company accept working from home and people would rather work remotely than at the company. Is that actual solution for the balance? I would say that it is actually allowed to mix their work and privacy and it causes miscommunication between coworkers. We should separate the time to focus on what we are doing and to take a rest. Otherwise, we would have stress and make complicated relationship between family, friends and coworkers.
All of considered, I refer computers as the thing have made our life complicated and stressful.
- TOEFL Official Guide - Practice Test 2 - Integrated Writing - Professors on TV 3
- The emperor Claudius of Rome ruled an empire spanning three continents between 41 and 54 CE. His reign was of massive importance to the history of ancient European civilization. In fact, the emperor was among the most innovative, fair, and wise in all Rom 75
- Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live. 73
- TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r 70
- TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'necessary equipment'.
Suggestion: necessary equipment
...fore. At work, laptop is becoming a necessary equipment. Especially for people work on technolo...
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Line 7, column 432, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'trust'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: trust
...nd costs, in the contrast, how does she trusts and make a decision for new project? Th...
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Line 7, column 500, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...or new project? The information she has was the only voice and images through the l...
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Line 7, column 870, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun company seems to be countable; consider using: 'many companies'.
Suggestion: many companies
...ould love to spend time more at home so many company accept working from home and people wou...
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Line 7, column 932, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'work'
Suggestion: work
...rking from home and people would rather working remotely than at the company. Is that a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83950617284 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62897458949 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553086419753 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4800671145 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2173913043 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6086956522 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23092913574 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584755715038 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074599992059 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186474696421 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865467047824 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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