Nowadays, with the advance of technology and transportation, people can easily move through the world, to go and to come back just take some minutes to hours. This associated to the fact that by expanding horizons we get more opportunities, I believe that moving to different places during the life is totally positive.
There are many reasons that people decide to leave their hometown, such as completing the studies, looking for a better job, a warmer weather or a safer town. The decision of moving can be encouraged by the fact that the means of transport are very developed, which can allow you to visit your hometown more often than it would be possible last century, for example. I am a proof that leaving my hometown was an impulse for my career. I used to life in a small city on the countryside, which there was not a lot of study opportunities. When I was sixteen, I decided to move out my parents’ house to live in the capital of the province. My goal was to finish the college and get into medical school. It was hard to adapt to a life style totally different that I used to live before. It requires independency, maturity and hard work. However, it was totally paid off. Now I am finishing medical school and I cannot imagine myself living again on my hometown.
Besides the fact that moving to a bigger city is linked to the improvement of the professional career, it also helps on the knowledge development. Larger cities offer more opportunities to grow intellectually, not only because there are better schools and universities but also because there is a larger amount of leisure activities that are “brain developer”, such as museums, theater, libraries, concerts. For example, when I return to my hometown, I usually spend the time going to restaurants or to my friend’s house because there is not much other activity to do. In the contrary, at the capital I have plenty of options of leisure and I use to spend my free time going to a jazz concert, watching a new French movie on the cinema or a play in the theater that often discuss about important social subject as racism, female power, environmental care, etc.
Lastly, moving to different places introduces you to different cultures, new experiences and contact to diverse kind of society and visions of the world that finishes by opening your mind. We can do an allusion to the Plato’s cave to better understand it. If you live your entire live in a same city, you would believe that there is not more than what you are experiencing in there. In other words, you would believe that all the rest of the world it is similar to where you live. But, if you finally go out from the “cave”, you will discover a different world. Maybe the trees, sky and animals are the same. However, the life style, culture, points of views are never exactly the same from a city to other and these differences are even larger between countries. There are so much to see outside that once starting seeing it, the desire of discover more the world just grow.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that is very positive to move to different places during a lifetime. Besides opening many doors to a better professional career, it is also develops the intellect and opens the mind.
- Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 85
- Pets should be treated like family members. 70
- Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out In your opinion is it important for everyone to learn English Should we try to ensure the survival of local lang 73
- Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it, or is it better to save for some time in the future? 66
- TOEFL ESSAY: Leaders like John F. Kennedy and Martin Luther King have made important contributions to other people of the United States. Name another world leader you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice. 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 659, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...have plenty of options of leisure and I use to spend my free time going to a jazz c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2712.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 572.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74125874126 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80603282869 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491258741259 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 887.4 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0336155269 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.307692308 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207605278198 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498844978342 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449334062792 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987538686259 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305614546797 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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