Nowadays, many people think where to raise children is important since the environment is a major factor that affect their children a lot. Some people may think that the countryside is the best place to raise children because children can experience the nature directly. However, I strongly believe that the best place to raise children is in a city because of following reasons.
First, living in a city gives easier access to many services. There are many transportaions in cities such as a bus, a train, and a subway while the countrysides have only few buses. In addition, paved road in cities allow cars to run stable. In contrast, most of roads in countryside are unpaved roads. Furthermore, city has better medical services and educational services than the countryside does. For example, the statistic which compares the college entrance rate between the cities and the countrysides shows that the most of students who went college were raised in a city. This is because of the difference of educational environments between a city and a countryside.
Secondly, living in a city enable people to get the information faster. Since a city is an economic hub, most of events and information occur from it. Also, if the internet connection is provided, people can access information easily. However, countryside has poor internet connection and some places are unavailable to have a phone call. For instance, I have been to a remoted area for few days. It was so uncomfortable that I could have only phone calls. I could not even hear clearly and the call disconnected sometimes.
In conclusion, cities gives easier access to many services and allow people to get the information faster compared to countrysides. Some people may think that it is good to raise in a countryside because children can learn many skills that cannot obtain in cities like farming. However, this is just useless in the modern society. As a result, I believe that the city is the better place than the countryside for raising children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99703264095 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84451663869 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474777448071 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4967710211 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1904761905 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0476190476 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294745342254 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861618460853 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921439533948 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199651191806 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108972915023 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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