There is a great debate about how much should parents influence children’s decisions, specially concerning to how do they spent their leisure time. In my opinion, children should decide on their own which hobbies and activities they will practice during free time, but I also think that parents should be smart enough to guide them for the right path.
First of all, hobbies are meant to be funny and pleasant activities, overall, for kids. Still, there is a chance for hobbies to be useful in order to identify skills and talents of the younger members of the family. For example, if a kid likes music and decide to play an instrument, that could be indicative of what he would do in the future. But, if parents push too hard for another activity like painting, children will never discover their real aptitudes.
Second, letting children choose their interests is a great way to learn responsibility. Since, kids very often make their mistakes unintentionally, they are prone to recognize something wrong if they are engaged and interested on it. I can cite my experience as an example: when I was younger I was a messy girl. I always forgot to prepare my bag, pencils and notebooks until I discover the painting workshop at my school. So, I was so excited about it that every night I prepared my stuffs for the next day because I didn’t wanted to miss my canvas and brushes. This way, I also equipped my bag for regular classes.
Third, children often enjoy activities that parents believe useless like electronic sports and video games. They are specially involved with technology so many of them will be attracted to computers and cells. Parents should respect this and understand that a hobby is something you really wanna do after homework and obligatory classes.
Once more, parents are authority figures that should provide enough possibilities to find out a variety of leisure activities, but without forcing them to the ‘good ones’ or ‘profitable ones’.
- Young people enjoy life more than older people do.Do you agree or disagree? 78
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 90
- Some people think that parents should plan their children’s leisure time carefully. Other people believe? those children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time, Which idea do you agree with? Give reasons for your choice. 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, still, third, for example, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02702702703 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80221536816 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603603603604 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9251889886 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.625 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298013273853 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896159038437 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845146415444 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167534267227 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111287374618 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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