Some people want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other people prefer to stay with their families for a longer time.
Some young people prefer to leave parental home for independence as soon as possible while others would rather to stay longer. As for me, I would stay with my parents for a longer time unitl I am fianicially independent to afford housing on my own. Leaving parental home as part of the transititon to adulthood would surely grant some adults' independence. However, moving out does not neccarilly mean independence for young people. The ability to live on one's own is the core of independence, regardlless whether he or she lives under his or her parents' roof or not.
I prefer to stay at my parents' house for a longer time because I want a smoother transtition to adualthood. Nowadays, housing is not that affordable to most people in their 20s, especially for the early 20s. Living with parents would help save up a lot, thus ensuring finanical independence to come earlier. As for people who move out soon, they might spend quite a lot to rent a living place and it is highly likely that some of them can only afford a less cozy room. Though living away from parents would provide them a sense of independence, the trade-off for such independence does not seem economical to me.
Independence is not just about living alone. Independence is about solving problems in a matual way. For people who move out young, it is not deniable that they would learn how to live on their own by living away from parents. However, it is also undeniable that most of them would struggel due to tight budget since housing costs much and young people tend to earn less. Contrary to moving out, staying longer with parents can facilite younge people to save money on housing. Some may argue that these people who are reluctant to leave home never get independent because they do not have the chance to solve problems solely. Plausible as it may seem at the first glance, however, such claim disregard that moving out alone does not guarantee independence. For example, if people who move out but cannot afford the rent and still ask their parent for fianicial support, that doesn't mean independence. Likewise, for people who stay but manage to plan their budget, it is independence.
In sum, moving out of parents' place could provide some independence to some adults. However, independence is not only about leaving home. The key to successful transition to adulthood requires more than that and the core of independence is solving problems matually. Leaving home too early is finacially reeless.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to house'.
Suggestion: to house
... I am fianicially independent to afford housing on my own. Leaving parental home as pa...
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Line 1, column 337, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adults'' or 'adult's'?
Suggestion: adults'; adult's
...on to adulthood would surely grant some adults independence. However, moving out does ...
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Line 9, column 487, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...ople to save money on housing. Some may argue that these people who are reluctant to ...
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Line 9, column 876, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...heir parent for fianicial support, that doesnt mean independence. Likewise, for people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, may, so, still, thus, while, as for, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85680751174 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66447229194 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485915492958 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1511153075 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9565217391 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4015298757 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122190303396 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956902716314 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259348404743 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912115064093 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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