some rules of societies may push too hard on the youths.
Within recent 30 years, the time has witnessed the dramatic and rapid changes in the world. So, the rules of societies expecting young people to follow is more and more. The interesting question about whether those rules push the youths too hard is in the air. As for me, I believe that those rules may be too strict with the young people, even prevent them from the better development.
To begin with, the strict rules from their parents may harm the youth's development. Nowadays, due to increasing numbers of parents are affected by some opinions from some "experts" of education, some teachers in tutoring centers or others parents, parents start to force their children to take all kinds of courses in tutoring centers. Instead of doing physical exercises or hanging out with their friends, the youths have spent almost all the time on their study or some extra courses. For example, it is reported in the TV news recently that over 30% juveniles in Guangzhou have to take more than 5 extra courses in their summer vacation. Most of them are much busier than their regular school time, thus some students do not hope to the reach of summer vacation. What a painful of those youths' vacation is. And the most ridiculous reason for those parents' choices is not falling behind the others. As we know, the interest is the main power to fuel the progress of study. If the youths waste their own time on taking some course they hate, how could they get the progress in this process? It may even lead to the fears or hates about learning anything.
In addition, some strict rules may come from traditional or mainstream thought of the society. For example, the mainstream thought of the best career in China must be staying in stable companies or administrations for the whole working life, because people believe that it could be more stable and secure not matter for their family or for themselves. This thought may work in the past when people still suffered the hunger, but is not working anymore now, due to the limit possibility for making progress in the career, pursuing the goals or doing something which the individual is most interested in. The youths do not hope to fit with this mainstream thought, which could waste their treasure and not-again life, but their parents or relatives still stick with the traditional thought. Therefore, it are those mainstream thoughts or rules in society that prohibit the creativities of youths and possibilities of their future.
Admittedly, the most rules in societies form with some experiences from the elders or some mistake made in the past, and thus they should be respected or accepted by the youths with the critical thinking, due to some old-fashion or misguided rules.
In a word, some rules of societies may push too hard on the youths. Even though they may be well intentioned at the beginning, they could also harm the development of the youths.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as for, for example, in addition, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84769539078 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55906566407 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478957915832 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1063505783 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.954545455 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304628085981 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111540821641 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186254291775 0.0737576698707 253% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233312667493 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159789102476 0.0645574589148 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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