Some universities focus on having excellent libraries, laboratories, and other facilities. Others focus more on hiring the most successful and qualified professors. Which system do you think benefits students more, and why? Include details and examples in your explanation.
Needless to say that education is not a preparation for life, but it is life itself. Therefore, the majority of high school graduates have striven to pursue their higher education that can guarantee them a secure career in the future. Recently, the amelioration of higher education standards has aroused numerous debates. Many people think that universities should focus on advancing their facilities like libraries and laboratories to provide better education for their scholars. However, from my perspective, I firmly believe that hiring skilled instructors is far more significant. I hold that opinion based on two main points that I will further explore in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point to mention is that colleges should wisely select their lecturers since they are the motive power for education progression. To elaborate on that point, I undoubtedly believe that skilled lecturers can help students to grasp the fundamental knowledge to be excellent candidates in the future, even in the presence of fierce competition. In addition to the knowledge gain, discussion with those expert instructors can also pave the way for scholars to develop several skills like critical thinking skills that can profound their comprehension of academic curriculums. My experience is a relevant example to support this viewpoint, I vividly remember because of my pharmacology professor 's sincere advice, guidance, and immeasurable support, I managed to conduct unique research for a new hepatitis therapy while I was in college. Admittedly, because of it, I managed not only to be graduated with honor but also to be selected to work in Glaxo, One of the most famous leading pharmaceuticals companies in my country. Based on what I mentioned, We can conclude that colleges should consider hiring skilled teachers as a priority to help scholars to sharpen their professional skills.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that reliance on technology can provide teachers will supportive educative tools that can offset the absence of advanced facilities in collage. To shed light on this point, I firmly believe that based on the technology, skilled teachers can wisely select U.tube videos, online references, and abstracts of many studies conducted by experts that can help students to have a profound comprehension for academic curriculum, even in the absence of advanced facilities of the college. The article that I read in the New York Times can provide a piece of evidence on that point, according to the study that conducted at Oxford University, statistics reveal that reliance on internet technology has enabled ninety-five percent of colleges in numerous states in the USA to enhance the academic performance of their graduates. As you can see, teachers have a significant role in education. Meanwhile, many other alternative options can compensate for the unavailability of some advanced facilities in the college.
In conclusion, if we contemplate the mentioned reasons, we will soon realize that lecturers' role in the education process is more important than any other supplemental tool in the education process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2677.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44105691057 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05522016378 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518292682927 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.6394007139 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.722222222 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0865332423269 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296540918423 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304132877608 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0574081228847 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164977522408 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 58.1214874552 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 86.8835125448 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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