Sheltering is one of the most significant requirements for people and young people always try to decide when they should leave their parents’ home. There is no shortage of debate about whether it is better to live with family as long as possible or to rent a house to live independently. When I consider about aspects to youth life, living with family looks more beneficial. Recent researches indicate that people who live with their families are happier when compared to the ones living alone. When above reasons are taken into account, living with family as long as they can is preferable for young people, particularly in terms of costs and life standarts.
To begin with, for young people each penny counts to spend for good purposes. Also, when I consider the wages that earned for young people, none of it should be wasted. For instance, when I turned my 19, I left my family house due to the fact that it is too far to my office. Then, I rented a pretty house in urban and I suppose that was the biggest mistake I ever made. In these ages, people like me can not earn enough money to spend it without thinking. That is why, living with family gives a freedom about spending money for luxuries, too.
Moreover, usually family houses are in safer neighborhoods. Choosing safer places to live is always makes life much more easier. For instance, You do not have to think about hours you turn back to home or just like you do not have consider the opened window you forget. Also, when people live with their families, they always know there are someone to help them in the house. If you get sick or face a problem, you dont have to look for anyone, your mother is there to care for you. Flatmates or roommates can not be count like family members about.
To sum up, the obvious conclusion to be drawn is better for young people to live with their family members. This is becuse young people who stay with their family, could live their youth better. Although it is common idea that living alone makes people more self confident, if you choose to live with family, you can do whatever you want .
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Some young adults want to be independent as soon as possible. While others prefer to live with family member as long as they can. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 583, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
... living with family as long as they can is preferable for young people, particular...
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Line 3, column 496, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
.... That is why, living with family gives a freedom about spending money for luxuries, too....
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Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...laces to live is always makes life much more easier. For instance, You do not have to think...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...ck to home or just like you do not have consider the opened window you forget. Also, whe...
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Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... If you get sick or face a problem, you dont have to look for anyone, your mother is...
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Line 7, column 338, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ith family, you can do whatever you want .
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... family, you can do whatever you want .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, then, for instance, i suppose, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57519788918 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2796218766 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509234828496 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4584453086 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249221921851 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923056622316 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695368468154 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167064821563 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659149040752 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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