Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. 2 Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Being Independent: Necessary or Unnecessary?
It is completely unwise to move away from their parents once adolescents turned into adults. Young adults not only can repay parents but also bring young them to success, for living in the family and staying with parents.
My first viewpoint is that adolescents were are required to reward one’s parents to their care and upbringing. In order to achieve this, the adolescents stays a much longer time to look after their parents. This means that you need to care for your parents in return of them caring for you when you are an infant. For example, you could check their health, treat diseases, and chat and stroll with them every day.
Secondly, it is an interesting phenomenon that people who are dutiful to their parents are mainly successful. Being dutiful to parents is a very challenging thing, so it will cultivate your patience. Because everything needs patience, then you will be successful in any direction if you accomplish this. For example, in “The Abdication of Yao and Shun”, Shun was extremely dutiful to her parents even though they tried to kill him, and in the end he became the emperor of the dynasty.
Some people may claim that freedom is just independence, . these peopleThey thought think that independence is going out to live living alone, but with the as-sistance of their parents. Obviously, we can infer that these people lack under-standing of what is independence. Independence is self-discipline whatever whether young adults stay in their family or notz.
In conclusion, reward for parents and self-discipline of young adults are the main purpose of not going away from parents. Still, independence doesn’t simp-ly mean living away from parents, and no sane adults would confuse it. Dis-ciplining themselves are important even though any adolescents are away from their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18151815182 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84769643747 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57095709571 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5057932167 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.2222222222 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339938108 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101353776848 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710241874218 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161452298026 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914191254667 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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