Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Depending on the life experience and personal emotions, some adults prefer to seperate from their parents as soon as possible. On the other hand some young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. In my opinion, living with families for young adults is much more better than living alone. I will bring my arguments in the following parahgraphs.
First of all, life conditions bring many safety problems in towns, cities or neighbours. It is clear that by individually handling these problems is more diffucult without family members. For example, If a robber threat a neighboord, being alone will make much defenceless to the threat of the robber. Moreover, safety problems require life experience so young adults don't have enough life experience to protect themselves. For instance, when an adult walks on street at night, some bad people can intend to harm and at this time the adult would call 911 or fight for the protect himself. However, at the same situation, the young adult can feel panic and horrour so he would be make himself more attractive for the bad people and could has been harmed. That's way for a young adult, it is early to live alone without having enough life experience.
Another reason why I think that living with parents more logical for young adults is financial and carreer conditions. Obviously, money is crucial for life quality and for young adults, it is little bit early for having a job and earning money because they have to focus on studying university and high school to have undergraduate degree. For example, when I was 19 years old at my university, I had a roommate at my dormitory whose name is Ricardo. He had needed money, than he had found a job to earn money but after he had the job, he didn't study well his studies and homeworks. Therefore, he didn't complete his university and ruined his carreer and future.
In a word, living alone is very difficult and needs a lot of life experience so young adults have to think a lot before decision.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... with families for young adults is much more better than living alone. I will bring my argu...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...require life experience so young adults dont have enough life experience to protect ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e the adult would call 911 or fight for the protect himself. However, at the same situation...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...attractive for the bad people and could has been harmed. Thats way for a young adul...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...e bad people and could has been harmed. Thats way for a young adult, it is early to l...
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Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ife quality and for young adults, it is little bit early for having a job and earning mone...
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Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...e name is Ricardo. He had needed money, than he had found a job to earn money but af...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...earn money but after he had the job, he didnt study well his studies and homeworks. T...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...is studies and homeworks. Therefore, he didnt complete his university and ruined his ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76285714286 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52145892333 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531428571429 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6773774975 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0588235294 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312179351344 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119561570891 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134798189314 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217892948499 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153047048768 0.0645574589148 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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