In my opinion is better to get independence from our parents as soon as possible. Some people say they need a little more time to decide what is better for them, and I think that as soon as they decide, they should try the world on their own.
As an example, I can mention one of my friends, she got into an university in another city and she could have gone to live with her brother but she decided she wasn’t prepared yet, she wanted to stay with her family for longer and ended up staying at home. In her opinion, it was a good decision because she said she wouldn’t be able to face the responsibilities of being an adult. But because of that reason, she should have at least tried.
In my case, I think I’m prepared to live by myself, I know it will be a challenge but it will also be a great opportunity to mature, to know more about myself and how I act when having to pay bills and to buy groceries for the house. It will also be a greater challenge living in another country, but learning other’s cultures will only make this experience richer.
My dad, as another example, left his house when he was 17. He went to follow his dreams of being a police officer, so he went to the police academy. He always says that it was a period of growth for him, and he doesn’t regret his decision because he learned a lot about himself and about others.
I conclude by saying that I believe it’s best to leave the parents’ home as soon as possible. In my friend’s case, I still think that she should have tried to live in another city, it would be a big opportunity of knowledge for her. I am excited to leave my parent’s nest and experience the world with my own eyes.
- People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. 60
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism. 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, still, at least, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36760124611 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5913760553 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526479750779 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.363690642 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.846153846 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155497926668 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583642905352 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057977673559 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912286081922 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753993227627 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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