Altruism is the main topic in the lecture and in the text. Both give as examples humans and the meerkat, but they both have different views on the examples given. While the text points that the meerkat’s sentinel can be a good example of altruism, the professor proves otherwise, and both also give examples on humans actions.
At first, the text talks about how the sentinel can be considered selfless by protecting the others. The sentinel would have to stand guard and look for predadors, if it spots any it will give an alarm cry to alert the others. While in this position, the sentinel won’t be able to eat and will also be in great danger as it is alone, so the text concludes that the meerkat gains nothing by being a sentinel and for this fact it is considered an altruistic act.
The professor, on the other hand, gives other facts to show that the meerkat shouldn’t really be considered “selfless”. She says that from more indept studies, it was proven that the meerkat actually eats before doing the patrol and it will have bigger chances of scaping from predadors because after giving the alarm cry, the group of meerkat that received the warning will gather together making more noise which will end up atracting the predador to them instead of to the sentinel. And that’s the reasons the professor gives to show that the meerkat isn’t really doing an altruistic act.
Both the professor and the text talks about human acts that can be considered altruism. But the main difference from both is the perspective, while the text only mentions that some people donate organs to others because they want to do something good, the professor goes more in dept and points out that the person that did could be looking for approval from the society. So it all depends on the perpective.
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism. 3
- People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, really, so, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 316.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8164556962 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62268278478 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503164556962 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.1078750101 49.2860985944 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.833333333 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 21.698381199 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06452816374 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0317993061197 0.272083759551 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0224222770676 0.0996497079465 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413754951301 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0257894462681 0.162205337803 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028314984778 0.0443174109184 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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