Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that people with good ability of relationship are more fortunate in growth and progress in their job than people who have weak ability to make a relationship with other ones. Contrary to this popular belief there are still those who argue that the most successful people are who that are skillful and have advanced ability in their work field, which these skills are achievable just through hard study at school. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that for success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than study hard in school.
First and foremost, people who relate with others in a well way are more favorable in their work-place than other ones. These people have more advocate among their co-workers and also the client is more satisfied with them. For example, when I refer to a bank I preferred the employee whose is more communicative and have nice behavior than a person that may have an upper educational background but who has a harsh relationship with clients. Thus, the well-related employees have more chance for growth over harsh ones. In addition, these people find more opportunity to make the relationship with powerful people who can assist them for development and obtaining a better job position.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that people with well ability to relate with people, seem more confident in others eye. Always we vision people with good ability of relationship with others as a person with high self- confidence and nice personality. We see them as a talented and clever person with a great performance in their job. I believe that this view is not entirely true, but it is inherently accepted by society. This assumption leads to these people give more wonderful job offers by company managers.
Finally, yet importantly, people with good ability of relationship, are more positive mode person with an appropriate mental and physical health condition. It is substantiated that positive feelings create by a satisfying relationship with people, provide happiness and calm for their owners. In opposite side weakness in a favorable relationship with people caused negative feelings such as angry, jealous and anxiety, these kinds of feelings not only threatened mental health but also has a lot of harmful effects on body health. Whereby, this weakness will be affected the person efficiency of works even this person has had a brilliant academic background.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that for success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Because people with a good relationship are more favorable among people and known as a gifted and skillful people and also they have a better state of mental health.
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 70
- TPO 20 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO 52 3
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Always' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, for example, in addition, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2403.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03773584906 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69092411015 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457023060797 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.7592542097 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.473684211 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1052631579 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423476092601 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168214560053 0.076458572812 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.195706756062 0.0737576698707 265% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306313296472 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.189316199847 0.0645574589148 293% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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