For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there are several important factors in order to be successful in the future's job. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely state that this assertion is not true. Even though some people believe that the ability to relate well to people is more important than study hard in school, It is my firm belief that it is vital to study hard in school. I provide two major reasons to support my claim, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I think in order to be successful in your future job, you must have some basic information about that job and you should attend to schools. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For instance, when I was 25, I wanted to start building some tech company. I was so confused. I tried to collect more information but I could not understand them. After couple of months, I started that company and that was all failure. I lost millions of money. In order to restart my own business I attended to some university. I tried to learn more about businesses in general. After two years, I restart my own company and found out what I did wrong in the past. I found out that I did not have any useful information about that job. I was wrong to begin some businesses without having some rudimentary information toward that specific field. I think this example could vividly show you how much is important to have some basic knowledge about that job and that field.
Finally, Most of the jobs need some skills and you need to learn these skills in some universities or colleges. For instance, Couple of years age, one of my friend wanted to be plumber. In fact, that was his ideal job. Once, he tried to read a book about plumbing in order to learn how to do that job. As a matter of fact, that book was not enough. He understood what he should do but he did not know how he should do it. At last, he found out that he can not learn how to do plumbing and he should attend to some college. He took some courses there and the end of these training, he knew some useful techniques that he could use them in this job. I think examples like this could represent the importance of the learning skills for the future job.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, I think attending to schools is really crucial in order to be successful in a future job. To support my claim, I think learning basic information and gaining some skills are two critical reasons on this topic. Of course, it might be other reasons, but in my view, these reasons are more major than the other ones.
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- TPO-3 Integrated writing 3
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- TOEFL T P O 18 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-18 - Integrated Writing Task 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 911, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...information toward that specific field. I think this example could vividly show y...
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Line 9, column 220, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...umber. In fact, that was his ideal job. Once, he tried to read a book about plumbing...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, really, so, well, for instance, i think, in fact, in general, of course, as a matter of fact, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41393442623 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39700410831 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424180327869 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 28.0 9.59856630824 292% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3065623337 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.275862069 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8275862069 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72413793103 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227891172001 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573745547865 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823800294239 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174252369034 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121150486511 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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