successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they already know how to do well
Taking risks is depend on person to person. Some they fear to take risks and some like to discover new thinks in their lives. Personally, I believe that successful people try new thinks and take risks on their lifes. I feel this way for main two reasons, which I will explore in following essay.
First of all, by taking risks and trying new thinks will help us to explore new things. We can have a better idea about the socity. Moreover we can gain experience about our lifes. My own experience is a compelling example for this. When I was a school student I used to play in my school cricket team. But I didn't know how to play rugge. Once there was a time that there are not enough students to play rugger house matches. My house master in charge asked me to play rugger for our house. But I regected his request since I do not know how to play. But because of his contenues request ai agree to do that. Even though I am not a good player I learn how to play while prcticing after school. At last in the match I was able to make a try and gain good score to our house. Finally we will able to win the match. From that day I love to paly rugger and now I am in my university rugger team.
Secondly, It is good to take risk because It will feel more joyfull than doing same old thing that we know. For instant, I was a art student when I was in university. But for the exam we can chose one subject apart for our major subjects. So I decided to take chemistry as my additional subject. My friend asked me to not to take chemisty, since it is a heardsubject to studay. Though I was not a science student I learnt about chemisty in the university lecturers. I had lot of fun during the lab class with chemistry experimants. At last I was able to score good markes for that subject.
In conclution, I strongly belive that trying new things and taking risks in our life make a successful person. This is because of taking risks made us to learn new things and it gives lot of fun.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
Taking risks is depend on person to person. Some they fear to ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...an have a better idea about the socity. Moreover we can gain experience about our lifes....
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ience is a compelling example for this. When I was a school student I used to play i...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...o play in my school cricket team. But I didnt know how to play rugge. Once there was ...
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...am. But I didnt know how to play rugge. Once there was a time that there are not eno...
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Line 5, column 737, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
... last in the match I was able to make a try and gain good score to our house. Finally w...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...a try and gain good score to our house. Finally we will able to win the match. From tha...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... thing that we know. For instant, I was a art student when I was in university. B...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'choose'
Suggestion: choose
... in university. But for the exam we can chose one subject apart for our major subject...
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Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
..., since it is a heardsubject to studay. Though I was not a science student I learnt ab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2088772846 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30104484563 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475195822454 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.3215275941 48.9658058833 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.5714285714 100.406767564 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.6785714286 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261141246549 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678975938541 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885787547234 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179610772252 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060947142606 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.2 11.7677419355 44% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 58.1214874552 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 10.1575268817 47% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.55 10.9000537634 60% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.3 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 5.0 10.247311828 49% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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