Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not a flourishing person takes risks and try new things compare that doing routine and determine ones for becoming a successful person has a great deal of attention from psychologists and people. Although some may say that by following activities that people know how to do it they become successful; I, as well as many others, believe that taking risks and try new ways and methods is the best way to become a prosperous person in life.
First of all, an important reason why people how to become successful person is taking a risks is that they learn many lessons from it. Many experts believe that ordinary people always follow a specific and routine method in their life and work. So, they are staying at the same level of life and social welfare. However, successful people, who have a high level of life and luxury conditions, try to find new ways and methods to become a success. Because of having different methods, they would order other people in their companies and factories. Consider the Tesla Company, for instance. Tesla always thought of different ways for producing different cars so that this company becomes the best car production company. But, if he followed a simple role or method, he would not have a car company.
Another reason for this point of view is that the flourishing people are no afraid of failures. When people try new ways or methods, they would face failure during their works or at the end of the projects. A successful person knows that learn many lessons from failures and change the disaster situation to perfect condition. Nevertheless, ordinary people always have fear of doing their tasks in the fault ways or methods. They would not have the ability to control their condition, and after failures, they become an anxious and depressed person.
Finally, it is occasionally said that it is more likely for them to become prosperous in a field that is good at. When a person works in a field of his or her academic education or has experiences in it. This knowledge or experience helps that person to manage the procedure of doing the job in a way that turns a profit and makes others look at him or her as a successful person.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that successful people do what they know how to do well, and they should not necessarily take risks chiefly due to irreparable damages of taking a risk and other possible ways for becoming prosperous.
- TPO 29 70
- TPO 31 80
- Which one do you do you prefer? why?1. A company offering you a job with challenging and interesting projects but less vacation days.2. Another company offering you a job that is not challenging and interesting but has more vacation days 70
- TOEFL T P O 42 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- TPO 21 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not a flourishing person takes risks and tr...
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Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a risk' or simply 'risks'?
Suggestion: a risk; risks
...w to become successful person is taking a risks is that they learn many lessons from it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8004587156 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58690687037 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479357798165 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4663898548 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.157894737 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9473684211 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328551835155 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098208711396 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108170057761 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223260436813 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133608580099 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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