Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
No one can deny that with the development of digital technologies, TV is something that is found almost in every home. In fact, is considered a helpful tool because it may help keeping people updated about the news and it may be entertaining because of the broadcast shows. Also, we can find about several things from the advertising. I believe there is a bad thing watching the TV at home especially when you have young kids. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the next paragraphs.
First of all, kids are very receptive and very sensitive at what they hear and see. I consider that is important for the kids to hear information directly from their parents and not from other sources because they know better how certain things can affect them in a good or bad form. From my experience the information that we receive through the advertising is not really filtered, in contrast if we talk about small kids is indicated to give them the information that is suitable for their age to prepare them to learn about certain things when is the right time. For this reasons, I consider that advertising is not a good to be addressed to young kids.
Secondly, if accidentally they see an advertise related to a bad news they may be affected by it and can develop an emotion about it, such as fear. Drawing from my experience, a few years ago when my brother was little he saw a commercial about a game and he was influenced by it. He wanted it badly even if it wasn’t suitable for him. In fact, I remember that is was quite difficult for my parents to handle his desire and explain to him why he don’t need it and why is not good for him.
In conclusion, I truly believe that advertising directed to kids is not good and may be limited or even excluded. This is because it can affect them since they are not prepared to filter and understand the information by their own and because it may influence them in a bad way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50140056022 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6152446213 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490196078431 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0305960769 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.133333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0932448993996 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375202322606 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498881673693 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0613286522808 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231856526246 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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