There are many kinds of energy sources that we are using. However, people should use cleaner energy such as the wind or water power to produce electricity instead of traditional energy such as coal and oil.
First of all, protecting the environment is the most significant issue nowadays. More people and government are aware of the importance of eco-friendly. For instance, our country used to concentrate on developing heavy industry, which not only required a large amount of electric power but also led to seriously polluted emission to rivers and lands. By the time passing, our environment got permanent damages that cannot recover. Now our government is trying to transform focusing business type into industries with lighter pollution, such as tourism, and trying to limit industry development by law. Consequently, it does have some improvements on our environment.
Also, coal and oil are limited sources; it caused thousands of years to form these natural resources. Comparing to other resources, they are relatively precious. For example, wind and water are long-lasting, and they could also use for generating electricity. On the other hand, scientists found out the volume of oil are fiercely declining because the demand is increasing. Sooner or later we will run out of oil. It means we should find substituted and more sustainable energy resources to replace traditional power.
Admittedly, cleaner energy such as water and the wind is much more expensive than using conventional energy. Because clean energies require expensive equipment and generating efficiency are weaker than traditional ones. However, the importance of eco-friendly and developing other substituted energy are greater issues. Sooner or later we will face the situation of lacking energy. Although it might cause lots of money on investing in developing replace energy, we should consider to protect our environment and find some else cleaner energy.
To sum up for above, using cleaner energy is better than using traditional ones. It not only protects our environment but also keeps our development longer. To save our planet, people should start to think the problems that these traditional energy caused.
- The most important investment for a big company is to improve the efficiency and proficiency of its employees. 70
- There are many kinds of energy sources that we are using. However, people should use cleaner energy such as the wind or water power to produce electricity instead of traditional energy such as coal and oil. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following the statement Being creative rather than planning carefully helps people come up with the best solution a problem 69
- People should buy things made in their own country even if the price is higher than the same things made elsewhere 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, as to, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52922077922 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94443646656 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584415584416 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4752842745 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.15 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296760512127 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814064032248 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848226894194 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179289460091 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736623335885 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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