There is a disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between countries on a country’s identity. What is your opinion?
Entering the 21st century, globalization has been significantly increasing, at the same time it brought a range of influence to our daily life. I would rather see these changing from its opposite aspect than its possible flaws. In the following essay, I will explore my point of view by analyzing two main reasons.
Firstly, the extension of international trade and cultural communication would diversify our choices of lifestyle. Let’s take the case of the effect of globalization had on Italian food and eating habits. According to an article I have read before, although Italians take a lot of pride in their long historic culture of local cuisine, as long as the range of available foreign foods in Italy has been increased, people now have much more choice in terms of what they eat. Especially after the influx of the convenient food, individuals don’t need to spend so much time to prepare traditional meals unless of course, they want to. Because fast foods start to be available for whom who can not wait for time-consuming food preparation. Therefore, we can see that diversification of food culture in Italy has brought immense convenience to Italian daily life.
Secondly, the global popularity of culture will ensure that it survives. Again, as an example, we can take a look at how Italian cuisine being strengthen. If you walk down any main street in any major city in the world, you will find at least one Italian restaurant. This means that eating habit of Italian no longer restricted within the border of the country, in contrast, it becomes more powerful along with spreading of all around the world. Hence, the crowd no need to fear the damage to Italian tradition by the influence of other culture.
To sum up, although globalization has had a significant influence on our daily routine both from the positive and negative side, the benefits we can enjoy far overweigh its possible harm which people worry about.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, at least, in contrast, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98159509202 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8161447198 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613496932515 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2489332183 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.266666667 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0430072681021 0.236089414692 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0156988032187 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0196906975703 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0185599719411 0.150856017488 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250656749143 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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