Today advertisment spread in our life in many different ways. Television show a lot of advertising programs, in addition to many posters in side ways of roads. The question is, whether thses advertisment are show their real charicteristics and advantages or not. This can be wieghed in many aspects. In my perspective, I concur with this notion. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my point of view in this subject.
To begin with, many advertisments do not show the negative side of their products. they only give the advantages of goods in order to attracts customers to buy these things. to be specific, advertising of chunk food like restaurants which offer fast food like Macdonald and burger kings, how these food are delicious. Furthermore, candys have a negative impacts on kids health. Advertisment of these food always in time of children shows. young kids influnce with these food and keep ask there parents to buy it. As a result, this will lead to increase in obesity between kids. Moreover, we can not deny the bad impect of obsety, like, it cause high blood pressure and heart problem with times. from that example, we can figure out the dangerous of these type of food on our health.
Second, companies always used idoels and celebrities to advertise their products, since , they know how people admire these famous persons and try to imitate them. Celebrities have influntial effect on our children and youngsters. for example, car companies select very famous person like actor or etheltes to ride their new car and tel people how this car is very conventient and strong, even it is not. When youth watch these commercial products, they will buy them, and after a while, they will discover real their real features wich are not as the advertising show. Hence, we see the negative effect of these advertisment in drive our decission to wrong way.
In conclusion, I strongly agree with the statement, that the advertisment alway misslead our dicission and never show the truth.
Today advertisment spread in our life in many differnt ways. Television show a lot of advertising programes, in addition to many posters in side ways of roads. The question is, whether thses advertisment are show their real charicteristics and advantages or not. This can be wieghed in many aspects. In my perspective, I concur with this notion. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my point bof view in this subject.
To begin with, many advertisments do not show the negative side of their products. they only give the advanteges of goods in order to attracts customers to buy these things. to be spesific, advertising of chung food like resturants which offer fast food like Mac donald and burger kings, how these food are delicious. Furthermore, candys have a negative impacts on kids health. Advertisment of these food always in time of children shows. young kids influnce with these food and keep ask there parents to buy it. As a result, this will lead to increase in obsety between kids. Moreover, we can not deny the bad impect of obsety, like, it cause high blood pressure and heart problem with times. from that example, we can figher out the dangerous of these type of food on our health.
Second, companeis always used iodels and celebreties to advertise their products, since , they know how people admire these famous persons and try to imitate them. Celebreties have influntial effect on our childrens and youngesters. for example, car companies select very famous person like actor or etheltes to ride their new car and tel people how this car is very conventient and stronge, even it is not. When youth watch these commercial products, they will buy them, and after a while, they will discover real their real features wich are not as the advertising show. Hence, we see the negative effect of these advertisment in drive our decission to wrong way.
In conclusion, I strongly agree with the statement, that the advertisment alway misslead our dicission and never show the truth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93023255814 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71520104968 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575581395349 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0963111041 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7619047619 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.380952381 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362416505183 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116684270728 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154220172513 0.0737576698707 209% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239867575184 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167973502424 0.0645574589148 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.