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Managing money from very young age would be too much responsibility for children. Young age is ideal for learning, playing and relaxing. Therefore, I don't believe that children should manage money at young age to become a financially responsible adult. I would like to illustrate this point with following discussion.
Firstly, to develop understanding in young mind regarding how things work would be the most crucial part. As for example, when I was a child I was very sensitive about everything and used to ask questions to my mother regarding some serious topic. Whenever I heard someone talking serious and unpleasant about their finances, I couldn't sleep at night. The point is that young child often gets serious because of the financial burden and that can hamper the growth. Therefore, it is better to keep children involved into the other activities like playing, group talking and writing. Young age isn't ideal for dealing with the financial issues.
Secondly, the financial management from very young age could distract them from learning. As for example, my friend belongs to the family with business background, She used have a good knowledge and insight of how to investing money and the other financial things. But then he lost her track from reading and learning the academics subjects and as a result she had to repeat one year of the school. On the other words, too much financial knowledge isn't necessary at that age. After graduating from the school no matter what people think children have to start working and saving money for their future. Therefore, they should enjoy their golden time called "childhood" in playing and having fun with their family and friends.
Finally, children with good company and good surrounding will automatically catch up on dealing finance from their elders. There is no school require for financial understanding It developed once they get matured enough. On the other hand, there might be negative influence of knowing too much related to finance from very young age. Several studies have been published on the consequences of financial knowledge on young minds. They have published that children who learn all those management lessons are likely to become mentally ill adults. Also excessive knowledge from young age could drive them to do theft and other crimes in order to get money from short-cut ways.
In nutshell, managing finance at young age is not a good idea in order to make them responsible adult. Instead children should engage in academics, school-related activities, fun and entertaining activities with their families and friends. As far as responsibilities they will catch -up once they develop better understanding of their life
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Managing money from very young age would be too much responsibility for children.
Managing money from a very young age would be too much for children.
Managing money from a very young age would be a big responsibility for children.
There is no school require for financial understanding
There is no school which requires for financial understanding
There is no school requiring for financial understanding
in order to make them responsible adult.
in order to make them responsible adults.
flaws:
Sentence Length SD: 4.928 7.5 //"Sentence Length SD is low" means that the essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length.
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A complete essay topic wanted. A computer program will match the topic to the essay body for independent TOEFL essays.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 443 350
No. of Characters: 2216 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.588 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.002 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.72 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.44 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...g, group talking and writing. Young age isnt ideal for dealing with the financial is...
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...her words, too much financial knowledge isnt necessary at that age. After graduating...
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...ing fun with their family and friends. Finally, children with good company and ...
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...e likely to become mentally ill adults. Also excessive knowledge from young age coul...
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...rder to get money from short-cut ways. In nutshell, managing finance at young a...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'as for', 'for example', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239583333333 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.16875 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0958333333333 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0604166666667 0.046263068375 131% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0604166666667 0.0685040099705 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120833333333 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0604166666667 0.0351676179071 172% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69309375647 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.03125 0.0309702414327 101% => OK
Particles: 0.00208333333333 0.00188951952338 110% => OK
Determiners: 0.0541666666667 0.0887237588012 61% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.025 0.0209618222197 119% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0125 0.0139019557991 90% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2722.0 2387.08602151 114% => OK
No of words: 439.0 408.028673835 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.20045558087 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.364464692483 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28701594533 0.251872472559 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19589977221 0.174417080927 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138952164009 0.112833075102 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69309375647 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507972665148 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 57.6463860735 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.56 20.5533526081 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.7394539959 48.84282405 55% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.88 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.56 20.5533526081 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.64 0.644075263715 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.261594533 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.45323741007 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0916318296753 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0607759239347 0.0752933317313 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.440213995768 0.497263757937 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0996187448373 0.151897553556 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.33508222635 0.336927656856 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0786851413932 0.067059652881 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.86379928315 285% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 2.4623655914 406% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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