TOP53-task2
In this turbulent economic situation, it is imperative for governments to determine their funding targest correctly. Theneed for a high quality internet access in this internet-crazed world is undeniable and many think that it is one of the government's obligation even more important than improving public transportation. But I would argue that transportation infrastructures are more crucial, besides the internet accses can attract private funding.
To begin with, as the population in cities grows, the communication rate increases and if al these people want to use their vehicles the consequnet traffic issues as well as environmental issues would be mounting. The global warming effects due to increasing carbon emission resulted from using fossil fuels apparent to everyone. Government as a leading player could tackel this issue by providing proper public transportation systems which are not only affordable and environmentall friendly, they are also a way to reduce traffic jams. Furthermore, the revenue from fares of these systems can be used in order to diminish other environmental issues.
On the other hand, demand for internet connection is an integral part of today's life and there is no alternative for it; unlike public transportation systems can be replaced by using private cars. Thus poeple will pay for improving access quality to this cyberspace as an important par of their costs. Besides, nowadays, private funding welcomed by many areas, and internet connection could be a compelling tagert for it. In this respect, I can examplify my hometown; previously internet comanies were under the cover of government but some other cometitor private comanies came into the play from about 10 years ago. After that not only did the quality of the internet access improve significantly, also the price of the connection decreased bacause of the rivalry among internet companies.
In conlusion, improving the public transportation systems is a more rational tager for governmental funding rather than improving internet access. This is because of the crucial impact of these system on environmental and traffic issues.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 242, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...le and many think that it is one of the governments obligation even more important than imp...
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Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... can be replaced by using private cars. Thus poeple will pay for improving access qu...
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Line 7, column 189, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this system' or 'these systems'?
Suggestion: this system; these systems
...his is because of the crucial impact of these system on environmental and traffic issues.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, then, thus, well, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09254413083 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569696969697 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8495826665 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.642857143 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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