TPO52-task2
In today's rat race world, all of the aspects of life have a fluid nature changing constantly. The youths as an integral part of the society, is more different than the previous generation and they have new behavioral patterns. In this sense, some, as do I, thinks that the soci rules for them are too strict. This is because the rules are out-of-date and also young people need more freedom.
To begin with, most of the society's rules are established many years ago and they have not adapted for the new features of society. Thus, young people usually do not accept them and think they are irrational. They expect that the rules be more updated to fit the contemporary issues of society. As they are more aware about new problems and see that rules only restrict them for issues which are not important today, they spread this notion to all the rules and they are reluctant to obey them
Furthermore, throughout history, freedom has been a crucial human beings' demand and by progressing society and intellectual abilities of humans, it increases constantly. The youth feel this need more than others due to the access to a huge amount of knowledge and information which can be achieved by a single click. Consequently, they can be aware of other societies' standards and rules and find the ones' of their own society too strict to obey. It is obvious that the social, moral and legal limitations of each society is different from the other one which is related to the historical and religious background. For instance, in my country Iran, hijab for women is mandatory because of religious obligations but most of the young women find this against their freedom because it is not mandatory in other countries.
In conclusion, It could be hard for young people to obey all the rules of their society. because many of them are traditional and against their freedom. It is recommended to authorities change their focus on some strict rules to engage the youth to obey them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
In todays rat race world, all of the aspects of life have a fluid nature ch...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ys rat race world, all of the aspects of life have a fluid nature changing consta...
^^
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... part of the society, is more different than the previous generation and they have n...
^^^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'feels'.
Suggestion: feels
...ans, it increases constantly. The youth feel this need more than others due to the a...
^^^^
Line 7, column 90, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...to obey all the rules of their society. because many of them are traditional and agains...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80351906158 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57198961678 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489736070381 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3016075794 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.2 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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